R.Johnson Wednesday, 11 April 2012
This is beautiful! The way you described it is as though there is hidden meaning, it's beautiful.

Could you take a look at my Writing?
Valentine Monday, 10 August 2009
I've read this several times over the last couple of months. This is one of my favourites. When I've had a hard day, The SnowFlake tends to refresh me. I admire your unique writing style.
Tatchania Thursday, 21 May 2009
OH. Ilike this one
Cam Saturday, 11 April 2009
I wanted to thank you for the kind comment you left on my poem, and also to say what a great work of art Snowflake is. Its really beautiful.
Thanks for posting this :)
lavs Saturday, 4 April 2009
This is gorgeous :)
Sarinom Tuesday, 31 March 2009
Thank you for your comments. and you're kind of right with the I's, it's kind of hard to use anything but I when he's the only real character in the book so far. I tried using anything else, but it came off too narrative-ish and passive and I wanted It to be more like a diary/account than anything else. but I'm glad that you pointed that out so I can keep a lookout for unnecessary I's.
Potassium Saturday, 3 January 2009
hmm...i like what you have written but the only thing that bothers me is the formatting. it doesnt feel like poetry if it doesnt look like it, does that make sense? anyway it was good so keep it up!
I D Atkinson Friday, 21 November 2008
I like it.
greatkiwipoet Wednesday, 30 April 2008
Too full of clishes and spelling mistakesc
Tatchania Saturday, 2 May 2009
i love the way you write, so poetic
Miu A. Oyanagi Saturday, 2 May 2009
That was brilliant. So descriptive that I could almost paint the image in my head. I also rather like the fact that your poetry isn't like other poetry. It's not in that:
line 1
line 2

format. It's written out like a story yet it's not at the same time. Props to ya, mate. <3

I'd like to thank you for your comments on my books. I really do truly appreciate what you have to say about them.
Cam Saturday, 11 April 2009
Another great poem
lavs Saturday, 4 April 2009
Potassium Saturday, 3 January 2009
your details are very tasteful!
Mary-Annalee DiGiovanni Tuesday, 16 December 2008
you have very beautiful descriptions, quite lovely =) spelling and grammar are my only suggestions on things you might fix up a bit.
Nverna74 Sunday, 6 March 2011
I love your poetry. It's truly wonderful. I won't say inspiring because that's too cliche. Your modernistic structure truly fits the subject of your writing! I love it, and can't stop reading. I would very much appreciate if you read the beginning of my story. Keep writing!
Capitalletters Friday, 9 July 2010
This is really well written. Writing has obviously been an avid interest of yours since you were really young, Iím guessing correct, right?
Anyway, Iím adding this to my favourites and Iím giving you 5 stars!
Well done and keep it up.
Mind reading mine? : )
Karleydean Monday, 5 January 2009
this was weird. it needs some work. I think thay the formating is fine for the way you write. this type is just not thing. but it is fine. and yes, enjoyable to read.
Potassium Saturday, 3 January 2009
your poetry is enjoyable to read, and to me, thats a tough task to accomplish. excellent.
Colleen Mitchell Thursday, 18 September 2008
You have a rather lovely perspective on the world. Really you do.
But it would be better expressed if you used spell-check and perhaps shortened your sentences a little.
But I still like it.
Allicyn T. Thursday, 18 December 2008
Needs a little bit of work
Clara Saige Wednesday, 17 December 2008
Thanks for posting! Your style of writing makes me think of a fine painting, with every element carefully chosen for it's artistic value. Your words flow together and create an emotional experience.
El Sexmo Friday, 22 May 2009
Yeah kind of created that word

Hungry is an attribute to lust as the lust becomes an object itself.

"Hungerest Lust" ~ Lust that is fill of hunger
paul schoaff Tuesday, 5 May 2009

thanks for the note on campus courtship. I sort of combined 50 years ago with some random today items. I'll peck away at that one a few more times to try to milk some meaning out of / into it.

Love your style, but I think I said that before?
Mary-Annalee DiGiovanni Friday, 9 January 2009
wow, so powerful...glad to see more!
i dont know why the ratings arent higher.
paul schoaff Tuesday, 31 March 2009
Thank you for commenting, again, at 10 metres. Do Kiwi's use the term "meter", or "metre" when discussing a poem? Anyway, I think you have a very special way of expressing your point of view. I hope your contemporaries there appreciate you.
paul schoaff Friday, 27 March 2009
I don't see how such thoughtful and sensitive musings can be anything but 5 star appreciated.

compare your office worker post lunch walk to my office-telephone-trapped Hyde.

Thanks for your comment at 10 meters. The one you complimented was, of all of them, the one I was forced to produce during the hour prior to her dinner, as opposed to those that have been kicking around for 30 years, never quite done.
Mary-Annalee DiGiovanni Friday, 13 March 2009
This is a splendid piece of work- the imegery is phenominal.
thank you for your comment by the way :)
Nickers Sunday, 5 April 2009
this one is awesome its my favourite one. so deep and meaningful
paul schoaff Sunday, 5 April 2009
ES: whether you call your writing poetry, or not, you seem to belong to a modern school of expression. You use surprising, yet appropriate phrases that are comprehensible. Some folks I read evoke a very mystical aura around a mysterious scene, one always just out of view and understanding. Yours are mystical, but I understand them, I understand the place and emotion involved. For that, I thank you and call you a 'poet'.
Mary-Annalee DiGiovanni Thursday, 9 April 2009
a smile?! gosh, i havent gotten that one before... what exactly made you smile abotu it?
paul schoaff Wednesday, 8 April 2009
This is a very tough poem to want to absorb. I'm very sorry.
paul schoaff Thursday, 30 April 2009
your work deserves more credit. It is more like modern poetry than any of the doggerel (including mine) found elsewhere on this board.

Thank you for your generous comments about LB12Meters. Please continue to write new material and to post it.
paul schoaff Saturday, 9 May 2009
I could argue with you,
Like Melvin Belli
But you can tell I
Know that just wouldn't do.
El Sexmo Sunday, 26 July 2009
Photo taken by Krapzapper (Can be found on Flickr) and is of Wellington Harbour, New Zealand.
paul schoaff Thursday, 14 May 2009
a possessive apostrophe here and there, but, of course, as always, exceptional evocative and descriptive power.

The 4 lines I left here and there just to joke about the funny rhyme of Bell-i and Tell-I; like 'coffess he' and 'Hess-e'.

Who doesn't like your stuff so much as to give you a bad rating? I'll appeal to Cook and see if we can get it corrected.
paul schoaff Friday, 24 July 2009

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