Comments
The Unthinkable Has Occurred

 
katied820 Tuesday, 24 February 2015
Who plays William?? He is so hot!!! Please let me know who the actor/model is! Thanks!
 
Danie Sunday, 14 September 2014
Hi!! How did you get the pictures onto the page? I can't copy pictures into Worthy of Publishing.
Fantasybaby Saturday, 28 December 2013
omg whose the actor of model for austin??? He's hot!
Fantasybaby Saturday, 28 December 2013
omg whose the actor of model for austin??? He's hot!
Fantasybaby Saturday, 28 December 2013
who is the actresses for adriane and jodie?
Brianna Wednesday, 9 October 2013
Pin3apple: That's me! Don't worry!
 
sabrinaspivey Wednesday, 18 September 2013
This is great! My heart stopped when Austin was killed. Wasn't expecting it at all! Keep going :):):):):):):):)
 
Pin3apple Tuesday, 11 June 2013
So I found this exact story on Wattpad... And I was thinking is that you???

Otherwise someone copied your book.

http:// www. wattpad. com/user/ gsztahcs
A.B. Ramos Sunday, 10 March 2013
Well, I have a book with pure pictures of characters. I posted the book, however, first and posted the pictures way after about a year actually. I do agree that describing characters is a good idea but it's not such a horrible idea either ChristAna M.
 
C.A.M Thursday, 21 February 2013
Doing pictures of characters is really lazy. I'd much rather read about what they look like and build an image in my my head myself then see pictures of them. It just scream laziness. It makes you seem very unprofessional.
Kristy Claiborne Saturday, 2 February 2013
They look great. makes me wanna read the book now. :-)
black fire night Sunday, 9 December 2012
I like it I think its interesting I like the plot to it too :) amd if you don't mind but please visit my books thay can help you find love so stop reading about love experience it for you self and let somebody else reading your story. So please visit my user name is Ravenlight and I hope love come for you all soon :)
Koti Wednesday, 10 October 2012
Interesting Characters and good read so far!
 
Justin Rosenthal Monday, 24 September 2012
Ehhhh. That's a pretty blunt way of giving away your characters'... characteristics. It's just bad writing if you can't work in the necessary details to the storyline. NOBODY is going to remember that (or, at leat I won't).

 
Pin3apple Saturday, 21 April 2012
I agree with haley!! this will help me understand the characters of the book, and how they look like. :)
 
H. Monday, 26 April 2010
These have helped me envision the characters in my head! I might copy you with this concept, if you don't mind ;)

love the book, by the way. I can't wait to read more.
 
Jaclyn Duvall Sunday, 7 February 2010
Briana,

Thanks for taking the time to read some of my book. I've really enjoyed reading yours, The Unthinkable had Occured. I can't wait to read more!

Message me!

Keep up the great work, chica!!

Lumpkin Saturday, 23 January 2010
None of what is true? Didn't understand your comment. haha
 
A Writer Thursday, 7 January 2010
whoa Austin is way hot.
 
cute4eva Saturday, 2 January 2010
how dus riley look? ... i think u should make cara look prettier ... i dunno
Brianna Friday, 1 January 2010
haha he is...im just having trouble uploading his picture :'(
A.L.E.C. Tuesday, 29 December 2009
i bet riley's sooooooper handsome!=))
 
taylor griffiths Tuesday, 15 December 2009
I'm actually waiting for another chapter,
and i barely ever find books that I like on here:]
Brianna Wednesday, 2 December 2009
no not yet.....im still looking for the perfect picture.....:(
 
Avalon Maya. Wednesday, 18 November 2009
have you managed to find a pic for riley yet? i wanna know what he looks like, as cara is like in love with him and such.
 
AS Monday, 16 November 2009
How can you leave it like that. I'm seriously gonna cry now. By the way i love the story!
Brianna Tuesday, 27 October 2009
if i miss a past tense verb somewhere let me know and ill fix it... thanks
Brianna Monday, 26 October 2009
oh and i should prob find a pic of zach somewhere...hes kinda important, dont u think??
llol
Brianna Monday, 26 October 2009
i took some chapters down to change them all from the past tense to the present tense. there are no other changes made, i dont think...
ill post them back up asap with a new chapter as well
Brianna Monday, 19 October 2009
everywhereee :)
 
Voir travers le verre. Monday, 19 October 2009
Were did you find these pictures?
 
A.Walker Saturday, 17 October 2009
Pretty damn good nice story just not quite my thing

please review my book The Assassins Code though :D
Brianna Tuesday, 13 October 2009
i will. im working on it now :)
 
yellow-pages Tuesday, 13 October 2009
that is the perfect Cara!!!!!! good job and please keep updating!
Brianna Monday, 12 October 2009
I THINK I FOUND THE PERFECT CARA!!
Brianna Saturday, 10 October 2009
as soon as i find one that fits what im looking for, i will!
 
yellow-pages Saturday, 10 October 2009
please add one of Cara i want to see what she looks like thnx!!!!
 
C.A.M Thursday, 21 February 2013
This is written horribly. No detail. I really don't like the present tense. This is really sloppy writing.
 
C.B.Taylor Friday, 23 November 2012
Its a great start. Certainly catches you and makes you want to flip the page.
 
Alice McKenna Sunday, 14 October 2012
Nice prologue! I'm reading Nineteen Minutes right now, which is kind of weird, but good description:)
 
Dan Cole Saturday, 22 September 2012
Forgot to rate.
 
Dan Cole Saturday, 22 September 2012
Good story. I enjoyed the alternating POV's.
Meta Brett Tuesday, 1 May 2012
Grrrrreat story. go check out mine and tell me what yall think.
 
Pin3apple Saturday, 21 April 2012
This prologue is amaaazing!! U r a talented writer and should give me some tips since i'm only twelve, and new to this site. u have great details, perfect dialogue and explanation. I can't wait o read more!:)
 
Daylight Dreamer Wednesday, 4 November 2009
OOoooooOOOo! I've read Nineteen Minutes! LOVE THAT BOOK!
 
Meriah Cooper Thursday, 15 October 2009
Your So Talented!! Love the beginning as well. =) Cant wait for more!
 
Taylor Hart Wednesday, 23 September 2009
Thanks for commenting on my novel
more will be soon
i'll let you know:)
I like the beginning it keeps the readers guessing on what happens!
off to the next chap
=]
 
AnnmarieM Sunday, 20 September 2009
Very nice start. I like that you're writing in the present tense. It's quite cathing and there's already some character development which is good. However, a bit short. Add more soon? Good job

By the way, if you have time, do you think you could check out my work? Thanks
 
Amelle M. Thursday, 17 September 2009
Very catching and suspensing. I would defintely love to read a book that starts like that. Keep it up!
Midnightdreamer Tuesday, 8 September 2009
omigod!! i totally read 19 minutes andi totally know what going to happen!! eeeekkkk...suspense!! :D
 
Disappeared Monday, 7 September 2009
this seems like a really interesting start to a great read!! ....and i really want to find out what "IT" is!! keep it coming girl!!
 
stormy no-one Thursday, 3 September 2009
Cool, for your first story ever, it's very interesting. I liked how it was short ans simple, but captivating at the same time. Keep up the good work, and I'd love to hear more soon,
~Kat~
 
Gone Thursday, 3 September 2009
Your story is really good.
I'm interesting to see how this plays out.
Please continue.
Keep writing ! :D

:)(:

Oh, and thanks for the comment on my book, I really apperciate it.
Tess Kiely Wednesday, 2 September 2009
Sounds interesting, but I'll wait more to be added before I rate. Btw you might want to use he a little less
Ann Lynn Sunday, 30 August 2009
It certainly sounds like an interesting beginning. I look forward to reading more and hope you plan to post more chapters for preview. I didn't rate it yet since I would like to wait until there's a bit more substance to judge it by.
Brianna Thursday, 27 August 2009
thanks guys!! I love criticism hehe ill fix that asap
Flower. Wednesday, 26 August 2009
I think I'll wait unti lyou add more to rate, but I just wanted to say that this is a really attenion catching beginning, so good job,
Lany
Also, would you mind reading mine?
Anonymous. Tuesday, 25 August 2009
Sorry, but I agree with the others. You metion 'He' alot. Try using his name, or reword the sentence slightly. Its very repetative.
So far I could image it, though u didn't give details to who he is and what he looks like.
But So far its good.
though thats just a suggestion

would u mind reading (and rating ) mine?
i-Anonymous?
please and thank u
:D

A
 
Voir travers le verre. Tuesday, 25 August 2009
Yeah, I noticed that too. Maybe you could switch the words up or something.
-A Monday, 24 August 2009
this looks really good.....
just one, tiny crit.
i think you use "he" too much. if you read this over, you might notice that every single sentence of the long paragraph starts with "he".
it's just a suggestion. ;)

J.
 
Voir travers le verre. Monday, 24 August 2009
Oh My Gosh.. I totally am going to keep posting in on this one. Great prologue, I swear this is going to be good if you make it.
 
warmsummers Thursday, 29 May 2014
If allergic to criticism, stop reading and live in blissful ignorance. Can't say I didn't warn you then.

There are so many things wrong with this grammatically that I CAN'T even bring myself to read on to chapter 3, I assume? One of the many, MANY mistakes including grammar, the plotline and the character of Cara already that it's making me regret joining this site in the first place. I like reading works that have some originality and is worth the time I take to read it. This is not.

One mistake to point out, when it is being yelled "MOM!" YOU DO NOT NEED the capitals as well as the exclamation mark, both in one sentence is ridiculous. Use just the exclamation, nothing else. There were so many grammar issues I could ramble on about and I'm guessing they're not typos because I can tell they're not. I am astonished as to how this ended up in the "Most Read" of this week. Worthy of Publishing clearly need to up their standards for writing.
lolita Monday, 16 September 2013
It's a very good story so far...nicely written.
 
britishlola Saturday, 3 August 2013
Gr8 story so far! i get bored easily but am happy that i can read ur story! thank you!
 
KCNiemi Tuesday, 5 March 2013
This is really good! I would love to get your opinion on one of my novels :)
 
C.A.M Thursday, 21 February 2013
Ring ring, ring ring...
Couldn't you just describe the sound? 'A high pitched ringing noise cut through the peaceful silence' Come on! You can do much better.
'OOF' I grunt. Oof is not a word. Why couldn't you just say 'I grunt,' or something instead?
 
Seta Saturday, 5 January 2013
WARNING: This will be harsh. And I will be using caps... probably a lot. If you can't take criticism, DON'T READ THIS.

To be honest, you shouldn't put the pictures of your characters up. Describe them in the story and let your readers have their own image of the character. It will be close to what you think of them as if you describe it well. Putting up pictures is just.... ugh, annoying, to me. It's lazy. Not to mention you can easily tell all of these characters are supposed to be beautiful, then. Which is just stupid.

CHAPTER ONE:

Personally, I hate for stories to be written in present tense, but that's just a style of writing, so I'll leave it alone.

"In the town of Salida, Colorado, Zachary Stynel lay on his bed"
----No. JUST NO. This is ONE OF THE WORST possible ways you can start a story out. This is as bad as, "It was a cold morning," or, "It was a nice day." IT'S BAD. REALLY BAD. It's boring, typical, and just so bad. And I want to stop reading already.

The rest of the prologue is so short and puny, it's laughable. It's also not interesting, at all. There's not enough to it. I don't even know anything about these characters. I don't care about what they're going to do. I don't care about anything yet. So I don't care about whether what they want to do endangers the whole damn town or not. Now I really want to stop reading.

CHAPTER TWO:

"---Cara's POV---"

No.

NO.

You NEVER mention this.

EVER.

If you are changing POVs, MAKE SURE THE READER KNOWS WITHOUT A NOTIFICATION LIKE THIS, okie? This is just.... UGH... It SCREAMS, "INEXPERENCED FAN-FIKTION RITER LOL". Because you see this in Fan-Fictions, the REALLY bad ones... A LOT. And it just... it's annoying, and tells you right off the bat that you're an amateur. We all are, yes, but we don't need to shove it in anyone's face.

"Ring ring."
"Ring ring."
Maybe it's a style of writing. Maybe not. Style of writing or not, though, this is just horrible. You don't even punctuate this correctly. It should be, "Ring, ring.", or MAYBE, "Ring. Ring." Even then, it's REALLY lazy to not DESCRIBE the ringing noise.

There's a crash? You write:

CRASH

You don't even describe the noise. And that's REALLY BAD WRITING BECAUSE YOU'RE BEING LAZY.

"I mean, how can I? I has to be like 5 in the morning!!"
1: NEVER PUT MORE THAN ONE MORE EXCLAMATION MARK. It's not grammatically correct.
2: "I has to be like 5 in the morning"...WHAT THE HELL WAS THAT? He turns into a 5-year-old in the morning? You CANNOT TELL ME THAT MADE ANY SENSE. "I have to", NOT "I has to". That's stupid-talk that you use with people when you're being silly and you don't want to be taken seriously.

"People are always telling me that I can be a model, but I don't really see what is so special about me:"
---Yeah, you do, actually. You just like to fish for compliments, again, and again, then say they're lying, so the INSIST on telling you how beautiful you are.
This character is already annoying.

Also: We don't need to know what she's wearing. We don't need to know what makeup she puts on. It's really boring and NOBODY CARES.

"Sorry honey. You can take over now."
"Sorry, honey. You can take over now."

About Bethany.
HMM.
How could you hate a gorgeous girl with blonde eyes?
Well, if she acts like a bitch, I WOULD REALLY HATE HER.
Did you ever notice, that when people have a really bad personality, no matter how beautiful they LOOK, they actually start looking really plain or ugly?

Cara's an idiot.

"She told me that once you guys eat, I have to wake dad, and then I can leave,"
----...WHY was that relevant? Who in the world cares?

It's also REALLY cliche to have one sibling who gets their looks from the mom, and then the other sibling gets their looks from the dad. You just KNOW useless jealousy crap is going on with one of the siblings, because you KNOW, either the mom or dad is the beautiful one, and whoever got their looks from the more beautiful one, is going to be more envied. And usually, it's the mother that's more attractive.

You tell us about crap WAY too much. You don't SHOW us.
This is telling:
"'I hate you!' I yelled angrily. I stormed out.' ------You TELL us the person is angry.
This is showing:
"'I hate you!' My voice went uncontrolled, reaching a pitch I never reached before. I stormed out and slammed the door shut.' ---- From this, you KNOW, WITHOUT telling, that the person is angry.

And you REALLY, REALLY need to make the writing less boring. This is how it goes:
"I wake up because of the alarm. I don't want to wake up. I hit snooze on the alarm so it gives me another ten minutes. In ten minutes it goes off again. I groan. I shut it off and pick out clothes. I get in the shower and the warm water makes me smile. I get out. I dress myself in shorts, and beaded sandals. I wear a tank top to go with it. After all of that, I put on my makeup, like foundation and eyeliner. My friend calls on the phone but I don't bother to answer, because she'd been calling all day yesterday. I smell the pancakes burning."

It's really dull.
It's SO boring.
I want to go to sleep now.

No, really, I just yawned. And I feel tired now. You reminded me how tired I am.
SERIOUSLY.

CHAPTER TWO

Austin gets cold water poured on him. You don't even mention him jumping up, or opening his eyes, or shouting. You just have him say:
"What the fuck was that for?" Austin yelps.
...Okay... THAT IS A REALLY CALM REACTION. WOW.
What the hell?

"EEK!" I squeal.
---She said, "EEK!" ....We already know she squealed. So. You don't need to say it.

And I stop there.
Because I can't read anymore.
I figured I could read something, to past the time, but I didn't mean to waste it. This is definitely wasting it.

1: You know what I think of the writing. I'll spare you the repetition.

2: Cara is an idiot who whines about her image, she likes her sister because she's beautiful, and complains about her beauty. She's also obnoxious to the point she pours cold water on her brother just to wake him up. Nobody, who at least wakes up from cold water being poured on them, sleeps that heavily. I'd know. There's SEVERAL other ways to wake him up. He has all the right to tackle her for her stupid decision to do that.

3: You describe people when it's not necessary, and you don't even describe them in a nice way. It's, "She has short blonde hair and blue eyes, and she's 5'8. Her legs are long." Horrible. HORRIBLE. Are there blemishes anywhere? Does she have freckles? What shade of hair? What type? How does it LOOK? Does it have a lot of body in it? Is her frame really curvy or thin? Skin tone? What are her specific facial features that distinguishes her from others IF she has any?

4: Chapter one and two did not need to be separated. At all. Same day. Nothing's going on. You should keep the two chapters together.

A lot of the slowness works because nothing really happens in the town, right? So it's boring. Okay. That works. But you could try to not make it boring to the point that you can even put some readers to sleep. It's also already been two chapters (I glanced over the rest of chapter two), and you don't put enough thoughts of Cara's into the chapters. She feels bored. And then she thinks about her friends. That's it. Is that is all that goes on in her head? What does she usually think about? How does she feel about how hard it is to wake up her brother? Does she always have to wake him up? Has she always gotten along with Bethany? Her twins? Are the twins how people usually think twins are, like they ACT the same, or are they opposites? Does Cara get along with her parents really well, most of the time? Did they ever have major blowouts?

Can't say I didn't warn you.
 
LizzieCalvert9 Saturday, 3 November 2012
Ooops I forgot to rate :/ My bad. x Duh, five stars! x
 
LizzieCalvert9 Saturday, 3 November 2012
This is amazing. Seriously. Wow. x
 
Pin3apple Saturday, 21 April 2012
yours good is right. I'd guive this book some criticism to make it better but there's nothing. Nothing i'd change! This book has been featured in the most read for while probably because this is an amzing book that should b published. I can't wait to read more! plz oh pllz, keep writing!
 
Yours 4 Good Friday, 11 November 2011
i am not going to tell you to read my story becuz whenever i do that i no as a writer i dont have time and all that crap. so i am not gonna ask you to read mine so i am just saying congrats on being THE FEATURED BOOK for a mounth and a half! woooooooooh! gooooooooo the unthinkable has occured! you know what? pleeeez read my book! jk! u dont have to! maybe you could get this published! that wood be cool! happy writing!
 
AlaskaEverfall Tuesday, 29 June 2010
I LOVE the beggining! =D
Though, I suggest removing the capitals and using only ONE exclaimination mark... either than that... GREAT WORK!
Rhose Whyte
 
cute4eva Saturday, 2 January 2010
nice start! real good =)
Ria Cherice Wednesday, 18 November 2009
Nice plot gets us hooked emidiatelly...But I have to be honest the way you word your story needs a bit of work and well you need to describe things a little better so your not repeating youreself to the point where were bored..Sorry I really do love the book..

Pleeassee Pleeasse read mine!!
 
Lily Robertson Monday, 9 November 2009
Wow! Lots of siblings. Neat so far. :)
 
writer Friday, 6 November 2009
this is realy good
Brianna Tuesday, 22 September 2009
OKAY CHAPTER 1 IS FINISHED!!!!!!!!!!
Brianna Monday, 21 September 2009
This chapter isn't finished yet, but I thought I would post what I have so far. Please give me criticism before I write anymore :)
 
YoungAuthors Wednesday, 5 February 2014
You have a good story going on here but the writing style and grammar is a bit.. dull, nothing that you can't fix of course, which is good. Just a bit of revising should do the trick, but again nice story. Would you like to take a look at mine? The Falling Gifts The Seventh Star. :)
lolita Monday, 16 September 2013
Your writing style is very natural and relaxed...hoping the plot will pick up as the story progresses. Other than that, it's really great :)
 
Sweet Surprise Saturday, 11 May 2013
Um..no offence but this style of writing is a bit dull. There is no...what you call it....energy in it. The plot is nice though but....the writing is a bit boring sorry. Its like you are lazy. There is not much description in this. I cant see how this is going. If it had any descriptions that would have made it easy for people to visualize whats going on. I couldnt read the next few chapters because it isnt exactly catching my attention. Plus the people's reaction is also not realistic. Its like they are controlled as lifeless dolls or puppets (no offence sorry!) i really dont know why this is the most read in so many months. This is just laziness. Put some discription and some life into these characters. If you accomplish this then i can understand why people like this so much.
 
Sarah Humble Thursday, 1 December 2011
Love it! Keep writing. You will definitely go far. Wanna read my book? I'm just 13 and I'd really like to spread the word! ;)
 
MaddieBear c: Sunday, 8 August 2010
little bit problems on ur grammer and other things but sdtill i love da story!!
 
Colleen Mitchell Friday, 23 October 2009
You have a lovely natural style to your writing. The only comment I have is that you may be using a few too many said-bookisms. (You know what this means I hope. If not, let me know and I'll explain it to you.)
Your writing flows well and is easy to read, and even though I'm a bit older than 15 (well, quite a bit older actually) I can get a feel for your character. This is a sign of good writing.
 
Kathleen Paddock Thursday, 10 November 2011
I LOVE it! No criticism here! Can't wait to continue reading!
 
Jaclyn Duvall Sunday, 7 February 2010
I understand your feelings of doing expository. It's almost like pausing a movie in order to memorize every characters physical details.
 
yellow-pages Thursday, 1 October 2009
yaaaaaaaah another chapter please keep adding!!!!!!!!!!
 
Alexander Penrose Saturday, 7 March 2015
As I guy, I know this was not written with me in mind, but I'm open to trying books on this site I usually don't go near - so I came to this book to see what the fuss was all about.

It screams chick-flick, no doubt about it, the prose could do with some tidying up, but at least this is not pretentious. No one clicks on this book expecting to be amazed by beautiful writing. You do what you say on the tin and, judging by the reception I glimpsed below, you seem to have done fine. This is not my scene, I could tell from the start to the end of chapter 4, but good job.

Also, could you read and comment on my novel Devil's Masquerade? Many thanks!
MovedtoInkpop Saturday, 5 December 2009
lovin' it.. keep me posted.
 
Avalon Maya. Monday, 9 November 2009
i really like this. it is good, but the tense is kinda freaking me out. im not sure if it is past, present or what? arg! but apart from that, it's great!
 
yellow-pages Saturday, 10 October 2009
i love this story!!!!!!
 
Jaclyn Duvall Sunday, 7 February 2010
LOL! The "school slut." Ha Ha!
 
A.J.Y Thursday, 14 January 2010
By the way, can you read my book as well for I really need some feedback right now?
 
A.J.Y Thursday, 14 January 2010
It is a nice story. You describe light things: vecation, school's gangs etc. and thus it is easy to read and gives a nice feeling.
By the way, why all the guys and girls in the story are brown- haired or blonde haired?

You write nicely.

A.J.Y
MovedtoInkpop Saturday, 5 December 2009
kaisa got it right. she's such a lonely bitch.
 
Avalon Maya. Monday, 9 November 2009
what a whore.
 
yellow-pages Saturday, 10 October 2009
another awesome chapter 'Barbie' lol but at the same time i like totally hate her lol(again) great job!!!!!!!!!! keep updating!
 
Sarah Humble Sunday, 11 March 2012
Ah! I love it! I've been reading for a while. Your stuff is great! Do you mind reading my book Fierce? And, if you had the time of course, read a dear friends book as well? Her username on here is Cassandra and her book is called Confessions: Silent Prayer. Her material is already being published, but this book in particular needs more readers. Anyways, great great GREAT story so far! Added to my favorites!
 
Jaclyn Duvall Sunday, 7 February 2010
High School children can be so mean. Tsk! Tsk!
Brianna Wednesday, 2 December 2009
i have like the next two chapters written. i just havent had the chance to post more. ill do it tomoro prob
 
Avalon Maya. Friday, 27 November 2009
Please Add More Brianna. You Are Such An AMazing Writer!
 
yellow-pages Thursday, 12 November 2009
yay! i love this book so please keep adding!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 
Lily Robertson Tuesday, 10 November 2009
Ahh, high school. So many memories. :)
 
Avalon Maya. Monday, 9 November 2009
please add more!!!!!!!! this is so good!!!
Brianna Sunday, 8 November 2009
whole chapter is up!
Brianna Monday, 19 October 2009
theres still more to this chap. so keep looking...
 
MaddieBear c: Sunday, 8 August 2010
omg ik a girl like ashlee has a rulebook and everything 2
 
Jaclyn Duvall Sunday, 7 February 2010
This Barbie is an interesting charater. Based off someone you know?
 
cute4eva Saturday, 2 January 2010
wat the heck????!!! the girl is INSANE!!!!!!!
 
Avalon Maya. Monday, 7 December 2009
Oh god... Riley shoudl just go and 'cheat' on her... i mean he can do that. hehe i really like this, Brianna! It's amazing!
 
bookaholic93 Sunday, 15 August 2010
Post soon!!!!!!!!!!!
 
Kx Wednesday, 11 August 2010
Aww, I totally liked Austin! Please let him live- somehow!!!!!!
Good storyline. Good characters. Great twists. Keep writting. Can't wait for more :)
 
MaddieBear c: Sunday, 8 August 2010
1 problem there aint another chappy!! write another 1 fast!!!
 
MaddieBear c: Sunday, 8 August 2010
noooooooooooo not her brother he cant die!!!!! -crys- and i liked austin character or not :(
19thmysticalbeast Thursday, 20 May 2010
Great. Fabulous. Will you read mine? It's the best! Thx. And put my story on your profile so others can read mine. Double thx.
 
Black Whispers Saturday, 1 May 2010
ur talent makes me jealous :( but i will look past that, and saaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyy...
GOOOOD JOB Brianna :) ur an amazing writer, and i truly loved this book..! :) and thanks for the comment on my boook :D
 
tokiohotelfan Monday, 8 March 2010
Awwww!!!!! poor Austin!
 
Jaclyn Duvall Sunday, 7 February 2010
April 23rd, the date of the Columbine School shooting.
 
Seraphina Grace Friday, 29 January 2010
Love it! Add more asap!!
 
Avalon Maya. Thursday, 21 January 2010
OMFG!!!! OMG OMG OMG!!!! NOOOOOOOOOOOO!!! Poor Austin!!!! NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!! I am glad you finished this but AUSTIN!!! NO!!!!
Brianna Thursday, 21 January 2010
OKAY THIS CHAPTER IS FINALLY FINISHED!
 
Avalon Maya. Friday, 15 January 2010
random,,, make them jump out the window!! lol,,, that could make for a funny story line haha!
 
Avalon Maya. Wednesday, 13 January 2010
Okay,,, sorry,,, i was just really excited thats all.
Brianna Wednesday, 13 January 2010
KAISA!!! im working on it!! my firefox is being a bitch and its not letting me post more...so i have to do it in school and i forgot my notebook...ill do it laterr today i promisee. i added like a sentence cuz thats all i remember =/
 
Avalon Maya. Tuesday, 12 January 2010
I thought you said you were going to post more up in the last couple of days,,,?
 
Avalon Maya. Tuesday, 12 January 2010
I thought you said you were going to post more up in the last couple of days,,,?
 
Avalon Maya. Wednesday, 6 January 2010
Please, Brianna!!! MORE!! I have been waiting for like 2 months for more to be posted on this, and I was SUPER excited to see that there was more up,,, and I got this. Slightly dissappointed,,, But, I will wait for more. Like a good little girl,,, Okay, I'm not that little,,, But don`t ask Lizzi,,, she will tell you otherwise. SHH!!!
 
yellow-pages Tuesday, 5 January 2010
awesome!!!!!!! please please add more!!!!!!! im loving this!!!!!!!
 
cute4eva Saturday, 2 January 2010
mooooooooe!!!!
 
loveofwriting Tuesday, 8 November 2011
T-T No why Austin he seemed sooo nice
 
MaddieBear c: Tuesday, 14 September 2010
omg ryan kill his self!!!!
Brianna Saturday, 18 September 2010
I'm sorry about the formatting on the last two chapters, and probably more to come...there's an issue with my comp so it screws it up...
 
Crimson Saviour_BVB <3 Thursday, 23 February 2012
Ooh, this is really good. :) Oh my gosh though, please tell me that Austin is going to be okay. Because I really like him.
Anyways, please update soon.

Creative Writer :)
 
JustAWriter Monday, 28 November 2011
Couldn't stop reading when I started. This is great!
Post more soon
 
AddyB1 Tuesday, 8 November 2011
REALLY??? You're going to leave me to wonder what happens next?? Update!
 
loveofwriting Tuesday, 8 November 2011
finish the next chapter man im dieing to know what happens next!
 
Kayla Beth Thursday, 5 May 2011
I love this story so far..you cant leave it like this i need to know what happens next
 
Stephanie Ames Sunday, 14 June 2015
I like it so far, does need some grammer work, even some more describing or details. if you like fantasy I have a book up as well. " Cursed Element."
 
Carolina Martinez Sunday, 21 April 2013
I liked this story! The emotions, and the confusing relationship of Riley and Cara is pretty good! I don't like how the shooting happened so suddenly; nothing was explained and it felt like the plot was moving too fast. But I really like the story, keep on writing!
 
Liam Rae Sunday, 3 March 2013
I seriously don't understand how this is always the most read book or whatever. It's just not what I was expecting. It's short, choppy, and lacks vibrant vocabulary plusI don't really get where this is going.
Not to mention I feel like you're copying another author on this website.
TheDayDreamersReality Friday, 30 November 2012
So good. Check out mine "Not a Belieber." Not as deep as yours though, and I don't have a lot of detail in my first chapter (only chapter) because I really wanted the dialogue to flow.
Soumynona Sunday, 4 November 2012
Very intense...I like!

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