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Alice In Wonderland (The Un-told version)

 
Lavender Downs Sunday, 16 January 2011
I hope you realize this is kind of illegal, seeing as how you followed the book exactly in some passages (yes, I checked) and you didn'tgive credit to the original author. Where you do actually write for yourself I think it is pretty good but the rabbit getting killed then being back again and the mysterious evil looking dude was VERY hard to follow. I do like the creative-ness of how the weirdo gives her stuff to help her, though. I don't get the effects of her getting drunk. Was she just supposed to get small like in the book? Anyway, make some little improvements here and there (like mentioning the original author) and it'll be pretty good!
 
Zack D. Monday, 5 April 2010
This follows the original book WAY TOO MUCH!!!
Sorry, but it kinda follows it word for word. Just be a little more...creative.
~Zack
 
C.A.M Tuesday, 22 December 2009
Okay, I just realized that this follows the original book word for word. I would suggest writing it yourself, just keep the original flow and idea.
Because otherwise you can't publish it :)
 
C.A.M Monday, 21 December 2009
I love the idea of the drink making her drunk. haha it's great, but I would like to know, is she a child or a teenager? I don't know why, but it would help :)
Mikhaila Cartiers Friday, 14 August 2009
some places seemed to have to much description, but i liked it. I am still not sure how it relates to Alice like Lollie said. It was good. Keep writing.

Please check out my story (and rate it) when you get a chance. thx (:
 
Lollie Wednesday, 12 August 2009
I like it, though I found it difficult to relate to Alice. Or even begin to understand her. I agree with AnnmarieM, there is too much description
 
Ginny Kendra Saturday, 8 August 2009
I loved it.

I was on the floor laughing from the words

...or was she pushed.

Hahaha very cute and fun, it's a lot different from my writing. I enjoyed it acctually and that's why it's in most popular or whatever this week. If you have the time read mine it's a little different from yours but I hope you enjoy it as much as I enjoyed yours.

NEEDING CRITICISM THOUGH SO READ AND CRITICSISE.

Ginny.
 
AnnmarieM Saturday, 8 August 2009
I have to say, a very interesting and unqiue (if not chilling) twist to a well known story. The writing style is good, although I'd refrain from too much description. Other than that, I really liked it! good work!
xxx

P.S If you have time, do you think you could check out my story as well? thanks
 
Miu A. Oyanagi Saturday, 8 August 2009
I liked it, it made me laugh at how much she talks to herself. Lol, I htink it deserves to continue as I wanna know what happens after she eats the cake.

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