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Withered Weather

 
Vivia Strachan Austin Aut Tuesday, 2 October 2012
I like this so far.
azebra Monday, 23 August 2010
My suggestion would be to trust the reader to work it out - don't be so obvious with the character and plot. You have a good idea but for it to be readable the reader needs to engage - you need to give clues not directions to what is going on.
 
Sophie Dime Saturday, 21 November 2009
Nice style.. nice writing... nice overall.. i'd love to read more!

If you have the time, will you please read one of my books? thanks.
 
C.J. DeLange Saturday, 24 October 2009
Ecellent writing and an intresting start.
 
Orengi Monday, 24 August 2009
Definitely a sucess.I love it.Read mine?
 
A.R.Latif Tuesday, 23 June 2009
I like the name you chose, perfect irony.
care to read mine?
Diamond Jane Saturday, 5 April 2008
Wow! Excellent.
 
Skye Jules Wednesday, 26 March 2008
You have a lovely style. One thing I did notice that through me off was that you use 'and' a lot to seperate your clauses. You can use semicolons to seperate those clauses, or even like this: Johnny couldn't stop staring out the window, looking at the tree outside. Something like that. But good!
 
annabeth543 Saturday, 22 June 2013
I love your writing so much! Its beautiful really, and I wish I could write like you!
 
Pin3apple Wednesday, 18 April 2012
Her house must be big to have lots of dangers. ;)i liked ur story i got hooked when i read chapter 1/the info. I bielieve mayb u should try now just perfecting the work. but truly, idk wat to say. This book sounds like its already published and i kno i would so buy it:)
can u read my story and give me some tips? itd b helpful cuz im only twelve. THANKS!:)
 
WriteDollySiera Friday, 30 April 2010
Is vancy going to become well....not snotty? I don't like her very much. This was lovely dear. Is it finished? You have many chapters.
 
Liam Saturday, 13 March 2010
Hi thought I would say hi, and let you know that I think your writing is really good. I want to keep reading it. Can you please have a look at my book. Thanks Liam
 
E.D. Putnam Wednesday, 8 June 2011
This story is pretty awesome :) The short summary really got me interested in reading it. I would encourage you to write a full summary! Besides one or two spelling errors, and a slight confusion on the 5th to the last paragraph in chapter 3, (I think you meant sun rays), this story is completely solid! I'm only on chapter 6 now but I'm really looking forward to finishing the story :)

ps. It really got me thinking...if she was born without the sense of touch, I think she would've died at an early age because babies really need to be held often. Most babies even find comfort in just being swaddled. I remember they tested the sense of touch on monkeys and the monkey who wasn't touched died very young :( sad day....
 
Ryoko L. Kawashima Tuesday, 12 May 2009
I love the way you write and it reminds me of the passion that VC Andrews had in many of her novels.
 
China Roses Sunday, 29 August 2010
Very good. Quite Intersting. A sad story in a way. Do you think you could rate my books,especially Choices?
 
ArMills Wednesday, 15 April 2009
makes me sad :(
 
China Roses Sunday, 29 August 2010
Good, but there is some words that need to be capitalized. Other wise great!
 
annabeth543 Saturday, 22 June 2013
I have never ever ever read any story in my entire life as touching and feeling as yours! Your writing is seriously fab!
 
Pam Monday, 12 January 2009
Very good.
 
Trinity Jade Saturday, 14 March 2009
I am very impressed with this book. You are wonderful at conveying emotion. You're great at scenes, but better at emotion. I could feel every word. It was a wonderful story. The character of Sunshine is similar to my charater Corrine, but not at all the same. My only concern, not to be rude or anything, is the dialouge in chapter 13. Sunshine has a rather formal and correct way of speaking, and you randomly made her say "ain't" which was a bit ou of character, in my opinion. But that's allright. Other than that I though it was great. I have been hogging the computer for a while now to finish it. (Now my dinner is cold) It was great. Good job!
 
Trinity Jade Wednesday, 18 March 2009
You are very welcome, and thank you dearly. Would you please read my poem "If We Must See, Let Us See by the Sea". Please? I'm very proud of it. Now I sound weird. Please read it though. If you want.
 
annabeth543 Saturday, 22 June 2013
It was seriously fabulous- I loved it! The only thing I found a bit forced was the sudden happiness of Sunshine's when she first went to Lavender's house- it could have been more descriptive and not so sudden tpp
 
Tadia Monday, 13 July 2009
Nice Book

Can you read and rate mine. PLEASE :D
 
Pandora Hotchkiss Friday, 24 April 2009
I liked your book but I just want to point out one thing. You forgot your capitalization. Remember names, I, the beginning of sentences and proper nouns all need to be capitalized. Other than this small thing your story was well written and I enjoyed it.

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