The Summer I Died

Amanda J. Silberg Thursday, 31 May 2012
you need to work on your commas!
Other than that; I like the idea! Please note me, when you've edited this! Would really like to read the rest then!

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Bob Craton Tuesday, 3 April 2012
Suggestion: Chapter 2 consists just of a narrative description of background information. Can you think of a way to jump right into the action and dialogue and let and reveal this gradually? (As i noticed in later chapters.) Your book does need some polishing but that is normal so don't get discouraged. Writing is a skill people must learn but imagination is something else - either you have it or you don't.
P.S.: Like everyone else on this website, I have books of my own to promote. I would love to find out if you have any interest in them.
Frank Holtry Saturday, 28 January 2012
The story seems interesting, but it needs a lot of work. I'd suggest submitting chapters, perhaps two at a time since they're short, to the Writer's Digest critique group for critiques. You'll get a lot of very valuable suggestions and insights.

Frank Holtry

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