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Vain Shadow

 
N.Raju Thursday, 13 March 2014
This is great, I love the aesthetics you conjure up as well as character traits being developed through dialogue. Its subtlety allows for rich language to carve a story for the reader. Kudos!!!
 
Mimi Gene Tuesday, 2 April 2013
I really enjoyed this! I can't wait until I have more time to read more of your story! Terrific!
 
Nick.BD Saturday, 23 February 2013
Interesting first chapter, love your style and the pace, great chapter, I will surely read on...great job
Catherine McCarthy Wednesday, 31 August 2011
Wow. these are the kind of books I wish I could put MY name on! :) SPECTACULAR!
Jessica E Tuesday, 12 July 2011
Steven Wyatt is my uncles name :3
 
MugumsTot Saturday, 5 February 2011
I love this so far. Adding it to my faves right now!
PLease check out mine, Remembering Brian or Collecting Raindrops!
KML Monday, 11 July 2011
I sure wish I had a paperback version of this. It's the kind of story I'd like to go outside with and read on the porch for hours.

I feel there are some places where you get too wordy for whatever it is you're saying. "The vicar's beefy shoulders began to rotate, the oblong head following until querulous eyes locked into Tolly's," is an example. I appreciate the image and tone you're trying to create, but it's just too grandiose in my opinion. I hope that makes sense, that I'm not starting to ramble.

On the other hand, there's so much about this I love. Your style is so poetic and intimate; the first paragraph of chapter two made me smile. Both the dialogue and the narration are written in a voice I've never heard in my lifetime; it pulls me right along and keeps the pages turning. (The web pages turning, that is.) Also, most anything I read is in 3rd person limited or else 1st person, so this is a refreshing change.

I hope I can return and read on, but I have to help with dinner at the moment. Thanks for sharing this with us, and happy writing.
 
paul schoaff Thursday, 17 February 2011
Steven, didn't know you were over here. Your great book deserves a top spot here.

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