Comments
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Trish Saturday, 23 April 2016
I enjoy the plot, but the grammatical errors and the writing style throws me off. I agree with one of the comments above, it seems as if they were texting.
 
Aidachi Tuesday, 27 July 2010
When you started I thought they were texting. Seriously. The plot seems nice but I just can't concentrate on it when there are so many gramatical errors. I'll go with Spindlegal and give you a 2 1/2.
 
♥cece_toocute♥ Sunday, 18 July 2010
too much grammar errors sweetie. I like it but those errors are horrible
 
Spindlegal Thursday, 3 June 2010
Bunch of grammar errors hunny
 
katiealyssa. Saturday, 15 May 2010
Oh, and I agree with below.

Please, please, please don't make it like a play. So confusing.
 
katiealyssa. Saturday, 15 May 2010
This story, is basicially the story of my life. Like, no lie.

I like the story, but there are so many gramactical errors it's not even funny, so I'll give it a 4.
 
Stealing Her Heart♥ Saturday, 24 April 2010
I'm sorry. I can't really concentrate on the plot with sooooo many grammatical errors. I understand everyone has them but this is insane. I hope you'll clean this up. & you should really "Quote" them speaking, and not as a play. Hope I helped. Sorry.(:
 
Bree Twee Sunday, 4 October 2009
Please capitalize your "I"s And books don't give as good an effect when they are written like a play. It's a fairly good idea for a story, though. 1.5/5
 
Erin Arnett Tuesday, 18 August 2009
please capitalize your I's, because your not texting on your phone. Unedited or not, you should make an attemt to try to spell right and captalize. It would make it easier for you later.
Scarlet Blaze Friday, 17 July 2009
I don't like how you wrote it as if it were a play or something.
 
♥Lexxi Kay Thursday, 21 May 2009
It needs some more discription like she sighed as she ran her fingers threw her hair. like it though! on to chapter 2
 
Kirol Wednesday, 7 January 2009
Not bad, but needs verbs and descriptives.
Also, grammar. Keep it up, though.
 
katiealyssa. Sunday, 16 May 2010
I cannot read this anymore. Sorry.
 
Erin Arnett Tuesday, 18 August 2009
yea, lots of grammar problems and theres barely any ? or S's. I'm telling you straight up this will never get published. You don't even descirbe anything, it's mostly dialogue. You switch between first and second person view, meaning sometimes it's " She was" and "She is" big difference. God, mines totaly raw material, and I capitalizze and try my best to edit it as I go.
 
♥Emily♥ Friday, 24 July 2009
Grammar, spelling, and I don't like how you say
name: ________
You really need to captalize stuff too.
 
Pandora Hotchkiss Sunday, 3 May 2009
I couldn't finish it was just too painful to see all those mistakes. Capitilazation and punctuation are imperative. Please consider editing your entire book.
Pheebs Friday, 2 January 2009
omg i love ferrells. i used to thier all time with my friends when i liked in kapolei.
 
vampire reader Wednesday, 24 March 2010
this is ok idl the tipe
 
AS Saturday, 21 November 2009
AWWWWWWWWWWWW. This is awesome, amazing, fabulous. Love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 
Daylight Dreamer Friday, 6 November 2009
Seriously, edit everything and write is as a book, not a play. Spelling errors drive me nuts.
 
♥Lexxi Kay Saturday, 23 May 2009
OMG'S! Love it!

~Alex
 
Mary-Annalee DiGiovanni Wednesday, 14 January 2009
tons and tons of gramar errors...this really needs work because it destracts from the story line. the plot is fascinating though =)
 
Karleydean Wednesday, 14 January 2009
I really like this book. It is written weird but I love the stroy line.
keep it up

karley
 
Fraya Lucindato Tuesday, 6 January 2009
That was really sweet! I loved it! ;)

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