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Nadine

 
J.Schinn Sunday, 19 April 2009
you've lots of passive articles such as "was" and "had- maybe try and limit the number in each chapter? great concept so far, so very origional; lovely job.
 
paul schoaff Sunday, 19 April 2009
there you go.
 
paul schoaff Sunday, 19 April 2009
thanks for reading my book
 
Geoff Dean Tuesday, 3 March 2009
What a powerful social commentary, and written in such a non-didactic way! I was quite impressed.

Please feel free to view and evaluate my work as well.
 
J.Schinn Sunday, 19 April 2009
oh, so sweet... i dint know labor could last that long. i do hope these chapters will be a bit longer, as they're quite short.... short but wonderful.
 
Honey121 Sunday, 7 November 2010
She's getting spoiled!!!
I like the story so far!
 
Honey121 Sunday, 7 November 2010
I feel so bad for smita! :( I like how the storys going. Its getting more instersting! I feel bad for the dad. He's very patient.
 
Honey121 Sunday, 7 November 2010
You spelled Gujarat wrong. I like how this story is going!!!!
 
paul schoaff Monday, 4 May 2009
have you officially become bogged down in the middle of Twin Beeches? I think you may have had to be a mid-westerner to appreciate all that exposition.
 
paul schoaff Saturday, 14 February 2009
Quite a touching and sensitive examination of what we in the states call "Trailer Park Trash". Will your story serve some sort of inspirational purpose, or is it an expose' of what all the rich blokes and blokesses are doing to everyone else?

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