Bob Craton Tuesday, 3 April 2012
Suggestion: Chapter 2 consists just of a narrative description of background information. Can you think of a way to jump right into the action and dialogue and let and reveal this gradually? (As i noticed in later chapters.) Your book does need some polishing but that is normal so don't get discouraged. Writing is a skill people must learn but imagination is something else - either you have it or you don't.
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