Whole Tuesday, 22 February 2011
I'm getting SOOOO tired of saying this:

Your plot is fantastic, and has huge potential, but, work on the language, the dialogue, description, action, literary devices. The grammar's awful, so proofread that.

THIS PLOT HAS SO MUCH POTENTIAL! DON'T WASTE IT! Go over your entire book, start over, whatever you want, but if you want to be published it has to be stunning. And, quite honestly, this is nowhere near stunning.

I'm only saying this because of the plot... the rest can be salvaged, so salvage it.

Good luck!