Trinity Jade Saturday, 14 March 2009
I am very impressed with this book. You are wonderful at conveying emotion. You're great at scenes, but better at emotion. I could feel every word. It was a wonderful story. The character of Sunshine is similar to my charater Corrine, but not at all the same. My only concern, not to be rude or anything, is the dialouge in chapter 13. Sunshine has a rather formal and correct way of speaking, and you randomly made her say "ain't" which was a bit ou of character, in my opinion. But that's allright. Other than that I though it was great. I have been hogging the computer for a while now to finish it. (Now my dinner is cold) It was great. Good job!