Internet Explorer
GenreFantasy / Children
Age Rating:PG
Submitted:Wednesday, 23 September 2009
Star rating:
 
(8 ratings)
Read by:182 different readers
 

I've thought up of this story in my dreams, it's mainly about a boy that's abused my his mother and soon but certainly finds himself trapped in the Internet.

Please rate and comment. Leave suggestions on my work and don't be to harsh, I'm only 15 years of age.

 

List of chapters

Ch. 1 Farewale

Comments

 
Amber Bell Monday, 8 March 2010
This is really good :)
Short but good :)
Your a good writer for a 15 year old
 
εxpırεd Wednesday, 18 November 2009
Please write more xD
The chapter was short, but I like your writing.
Only reason I took off half a star was because, like I said, your chapter was too short when I was getting absorbed into your writing.
 
<3 :) Saturday, 17 October 2009
It was really good, I only went down a star, due to the chapter being so short, because I was really starting to get into the story, then the chapter ended. And btw the spelling of womb should be like that, but that was the only mistake I really noticed, other than that it was a really good story. Also u should never put ur age in the description like that, saying don't be too harsh I'm only 15, but a real publisher wouldn't care what age you were, if you weren't good he'd tell you, so never use ur age as a sort of weapon to combat being told ur not good, u need to accept all criticism.
 
shaz532 Wednesday, 14 October 2009
I really like it, for 15 years old you write very well, you capture emotion, and it allows me to see it very clear in my head, I hate the mother already (or should I say the devil lol) Im adding you to my fav's list, so Im looking forward to more chapters xx
 
shareeg Monday, 12 October 2009
Its a sad story so far and the chapter is really short, I would call it an introduction. But this does draw in the reader and its interesting, I like drama type stories.

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