Mark and the Monster
GenreChildren / Fantasy
Age Rating:PG
Submitted:Tuesday, 21 July 2009
Star rating:
 
(3 ratings)
Read by:258 different readers
 

Mark and and his annoying sister Sally set out walking in the forest one day. There, beutiful creatures and animals roamed but it wasn't long before trouble and panick began stricking. Where was his sister?

 

List of chapters

Ch. 1 Sally!
Ch. 2 The Forest
Ch. 3 Monster Valley
Ch. 4 Frankie Business
Ch. 5 Monsters
Ch. 6 Friends
Ch. 7 Alien Territory

Comments

 
shanniebear Friday, 21 January 2011
You would really benefit from better grammar and punctuation, it's really hard to read when you cannot even tell who's saying what, don't forget you speech marks;)
 
Laurel A. Wright Wednesday, 6 January 2010
Please fix your grammar and punctuation, it would make your story better. I could barely tell what was going on in it.
 
Burn The Truth Tuesday, 21 July 2009
It's important to set your book out properly.

For example

"Breakfast is ready, Mark and Sally," said mum.

It's really important you fix up your grammar, otherwise it will turn off your reader.

Good luck.

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