Mindless
GenreSuspense / Romance
Age Rating:R13
Submitted:Wednesday, 15 July 2009
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(4 ratings)
Read by:232 different readers
 

A story of a child who spent her life in a mental institute. She hears voices in her head. Powerful voices....

The voices in her head told Maria Alberts not to fall for Dr. York. But her heart told her otherwise.

(This is a work in progress. And its not very much so far. Let me know what you think, and ill see if I want to continue writing. - Miley x)

 

List of chapters

Ch. 0 Prologue
Ch. 1 My Home

Comments

 
-louise-clair- Friday, 18 December 2009
Really enjoyable read!
Can't wait to read more
 
xRavenx Sunday, 15 November 2009
I love this so far! I can't to read more :) You definitly have talent!

Could you maybe read/rate/review some of my stories? I'm kind of new to site so it's kind of hard to get reviews and such, lol.
 
Haley Gray Wednesday, 29 July 2009
I really enjoy your books, if you havent already noticed?
Im sure your getting annoyed with me commenting them all the time :P

Well another great read!

- Haley Gray
Bryannah(Bri) Thursday, 23 July 2009
OH!! wow, this is great! For sure, it's totally creepy and intriguing. Great work!
Mary-Annalee DiGiovanni Wednesday, 15 July 2009
barley standing on the street? like on the edge? if so, maybe say "I stood on the edge of the dark and deserted street."

why?

well, adverbs like "barley" clutter up writing. you want to use as little as possible to keep the flow going and for several other reasons.

:) have you ever seen thomas the tank engine? the show has these little freight cars that have these annoying voices liek weasles and they always taunt the trains for every little mistake.. thats what your buildings sound liek in my head :) great job with that part :)

i'll rate when i see a bit more abotu the plot etc.

for now, its sleepy time for me... waaay past the time i thought it was

Cheers!

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