The Happiness Clinic
GenreSci-Fi / Suspense
Age Rating:G
Submitted:Monday, 18 November 2013
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Read by:92 different readers
 

A girl is placed in an artificially induced sleep to keep her happy and sane. When the program begins to fail, the girl wakes up to a world she know nothing of, and fights to return to her imaginary paradise.

 

List of chapters

Ch. 1 The Happiness Clinic - Part One
Ch. 2 The Happiness Clinic - Part two
Ch. 3 The Happiness Clinic - Part Three

Comments

 
SapphireRose Tuesday, 11 March 2014
Very good, I love the way the plot is going! So much tension, I love how you ended it - "subject status: deceased" - I mean wow, really got me hooked :) But can I suggest a little bit more spacing between paragraphs and dialogue! Just so it does not look like one massive paragraph! Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading more
 
OkamiWolf Wednesday, 20 November 2013
Good chapter. I like the way you write; I can easily picture whatís going on and the story is getting more interesting. The only thing I might consider is at the beginning when she first wakes up, maybe have a bit of her thoughts explained so we know how she feels about just waking up and not knowing whatís going on. Keep on writing!
 
OkamiWolf Monday, 18 November 2013
This was good! I like the idea of the story and it sounds like it will be very interesting! Keep up the good work!

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