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GenreDrama / Romance
Age Rating:R13
Submitted:Sunday, 14 July 2013
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Andy is new in town (again.) All she's got in life are her family and her art, and that's just how she likes it - until she starts to hate it. That's where Abel comes in. No one else has been able to make an impression on Abel, until Andy shows up. And they rip each other's worlds apart.
(This is a rewrite of the original story I wrote of the same name. You can still read the original one if you'd like, it's still up. Granted, that one has no ending and is probably a lot worse.)

 

List of chapters

Ch. 1 One
Ch. 2 Two
Ch. 3 Three

Comments

 
kthaler Wednesday, 17 July 2013
I felt as if you could have described more in the second chapter. Instead of saying how you are, maybe describe an event or feeling. I did like the plot though and this is interesting. I was really curious in the first chapter. Great job! Also, I would love a rating or comment on my story, "Demon." It's new and I would love feedback.

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