English Class Works
Age Rating:PG
Submitted:Friday, 4 May 2012
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These are poems that I write in class, or at home.

They're kind of about anything and never are really based on feelings.

So...just read it I guess. And leave comments, critique.


List of chapters

Ch. 1 Freestyle- Weather poem
Ch. 2 Original Greek Myth


Steven Cash Saturday, 5 May 2012
Very nice
Yeah, Lady Coldfeather is an amazing poet. Contact her, and see if she has any tips for you

Other than that, great job
Lady Coldfeather Friday, 4 May 2012
Very nicely written, I liked the descriptive language. You kept it diverse and didn't repeat yourself (something I have a terrible habit of doing). Each of the stanzas represented something which was as interesting as it was lovely; a point in the story.
However, if you read over it again a few times, aloud, you'll notice some irregularities - which, of course, isn't uncommon in poetry, but I don't think you've actually meant to have put there. It's the rhythm which falters a little from time to time, and some words are misplaced.

I can't wait to read more of your poems when you post them. I'd love to see you develop, because you have a lovely way with words which will improve with time.


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