dead is the new hollywood
GenreSuspense / Drama
Age Rating:R13
Submitted:Tuesday, 12 May 2009
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(5 ratings)
Read by:279 different readers
 

linsey thinks it is her dream to go to hollywood when she wins a contest to see derek devito...but then peaple find her murdered now its up to dr.corenna to solve this case
told in point ov view od dr.correna (gal)
pg-13 (maybe) some cuzzin and (lil) older peap topics

 

List of chapters

Ch. 1 proulouge
Ch. 2 a dead, raped girl
Ch. 3 im sorry

Comments

 
Haley Larson Monday, 26 July 2010
You REALLY need to have some sort of spell check. Your spelling is so terrible that I can't even read some of it. You shouldn't post anymore until you know you've spelt everything right.
 
<3 :) Thursday, 15 October 2009
Your spelling and grammar is terrible, you really need a spell check, it's terrible, your spelling I mean.
 
H. Friday, 26 June 2009
The plot is intriguing, but you need to make sure you have the research done if you want to have a detective in it. Make sure you know what they look for in a murder and rape victim. In my book The Note it's a similar scenario so check it out if you need resources! I'm not saying you didn't do your research, I'm just making sure you know you HAVE to in order to write a successful crime story.
Also, I want to know more about Linsey. More description and longer chapters would be nice. You write pretty well for a 12-year-old! You need to brush up your grammar and spelling too, capitalizing when needed, etc. Good outline though! Also thanks for the comments on Improper Bostonians!
--Haley
♥Leighann♥ Thursday, 14 May 2009
people. and Dead Is The New Black.. i wonder how you got your title?? Not from that book! Cuz' you didnt order that book!! i am warning yooh amy. well, not really wwarning yooh.

~~~~ BTW i LOVE ♥♥♥ the yearbooks!!!!!!!! great job to the max!
 
Miley =] Wednesday, 13 May 2009
Hmm... The title really intrigues me to read more =]
But you really need to edit, majorly lol
Grrr... i want to know what happens next! XD

- Miley =]

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