Beta Squad
GenreWar / Adventure
Age Rating:R15
Submitted:Sunday, 12 June 2011
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Curtis, a new recruit, is assigned to fill in for Beta Squad, which recently lost a member. As his journey advances, he realizes there is something more sinister to Beta Squad, and the issues are deeper than he originally realized.

 

List of chapters

Ch. 1 Welcome to Beta Squad

Comments

 
Hope1Heart1 Sunday, 12 June 2011
This isn't bad. I love your dialogue. It gave me a real sense of comraderie or friction between the team. I think you need to work on your description more. I knew what your character were saying but I wanted to know more about what was happening outside the car. I didn't even know where they were until you mentioned it. I think this has definite potential. :)

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