Let me go Home.
GenreWar / Young Adult
Age Rating:R15
Submitted:Tuesday, 3 May 2011
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(1 rating)
Read by:269 different readers
 

Summer Marie Carter has always been teased, pushed around, and tormented. Her dad deploys to Iraq, her mother falls into depression. It seems that Summer's life is falling to pieces. When she moves again to her new house in New York, her secret hopes of becoming an actress are uncovered, with the help of her new secret boyfriend Daniel. Will things fall apart again?

 

List of chapters

Ch. 1 One
Ch. 2 Two
Ch. 3 Three
Ch. 4 Four
Ch. 5 Five
Ch. 5 Five (part two)
Ch. 6 Six

Comments

Leigh Holtzman Tuesday, 10 May 2011
Okay, a few things.

Number one: Don't start a new paragraph ever time you start a new sentance. I know it gets hard to figure out when to start a new paragraph, but it will be worthwhile if you can figure it out, because when your writing doesn't at least look like you know what you are doing, a lot of people move on without even reading it.

Number two: Don't make your chapters so short. Explain more. Branch out a little. Combine a few chapters, whatever it takes.

Number three: I like it. That means it has potential. Spend more time on it, and this could be amazing.
 
chaseyourdreams<3<3 Monday, 9 May 2011
I like, love this book! post more soon? mind reading I can't fall in love?

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