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Those Eyes…That's all she can remember, they're distinctive. But why is that the one thing she'll always remember from the moment they met? She doesn't know why but she knows she'll never forget. List of chapters Comments
By the way, I wanted to let you know, the wrong rating was clicked. I meant to hit 4.5 stars.
Apologies!
First off, I would like to say that I truly enjoyed this book. Your writing talents obviously developed and increased as you went along and experimented with different points of view and characters as well as scenes. I personally enjoyed reading the Jason chapters and ironically, found that he was more of a thought provoking boy in the story. However, I did think Jazz was more of a Mary-Sue character towards to beginning so I was pleased when you made her make some mistakes. I also very much enjoyed some of Zach's chapters. As great as a writer you are, I felt as though I was cheated when it came to the characters in the story. Not the lack of, but the fact you had so many. It was hard to keep them straight and you could've obviously developed each one a little more than you did (however you did a good job of the growth of Jason and Zach, as well as Blake). I very much appreciated the twists you kept coming which never failed to entertain me and keep my reading. I cannot wait to begin the sequel as well as look at your other works.
Keep writing! -Julia
It's quite good. One thing I would avoid doing which really annoys me is the name for whoever is narrating at the top of the chapter, like Jazz or Zach, whatever. You should make it clear in the chapter who the narrator is, so have them talking to someone else and then the 'someone else' calls the narrator by their name which tells the reader who he/she is. Or you could just take out the different narrators and have it just one character narrating.
This is so great
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