Lightning In a Jar
GenreAdventure / Fantasy
Age Rating:PG
Submitted:Sunday, 25 July 2010
Star rating:
(5 ratings)
Read by:569 different readers

I almost gave up until I found a website called "when the stars" that matched my situation. I looked at it, and it was about a book based on Armageddon that was never published. So how was I 'spose to save the world when I couldn't even find the book that could instruct me? Thanks to the dumb company that didn't publish that book, they just guaranteed the world's end. Then I saw something that I was ready to jump around and dance for this, I saw his email and that this site was updated yesterday at 12:00 a.m., the time that I fought the star. I checked the latest update and it said " the end begins, the stars have started war I look for our hero constantly, Matthew Lane" , then I got scared. I was trying to be found all my life like I was some criminal. Then I felt wanted, this person actually believes in me, my parents called me a no good vandalizing little brat, but this person thought I was the hero the world was waiting for.

I'm rewriting this book, and changing up the plot alot. The writing will be improved, and it'll be called lightning in a jar deuluxe. Please leave feedback, I love reading it!


List of chapters

Ch. 1 How this mess got started
Ch. 2 I fight a star
Ch. 3 I get some unexpected help
Ch. 4 I understand the impossible task of my quest
Ch. 5 This is Sparta!
Ch. 6 "I'll take the bullet mr.President!"
Ch. 7 Am I dead yet?
Ch. 8 I never leave Troy
Ch. 9 We walk the fires of Troy
Ch. 10 We find Cassandra
Ch. 11 I find out what happens
Ch. 12 Great, Just, Great
Ch. 13 We descend into the Labyrinth
Ch. 14 Zombies!
Ch. 15 The last of Dadelues
Ch. 16 Where am I?
Ch. 17 My only thought was "oh crap!"
Ch. 18 I take the dive of my life
Ch. 19 I take matters into my own bloody hands
Ch. 20 Left Side!
Ch. 21 Total Fail!
Ch. 22 The Last of them all
Ch. 23 My first meeting with Time
Ch. 24 I fight a killer ninja robot
Ch. 25 I hate puzzles
Ch. 26 I become a magician
Ch. 27 "Is that a stick figure?"
Ch. 28 Sweet!
Ch. 29 I fight the guardians of Time
Ch. 30 I fight Time
Ch. 31 I fight Time part 2/2
Ch. 32 I finish it off


Jason Stamford Thursday, 31 July 2014
interesting interesting
Rabid Weasel Thursday, 17 January 2013
This book is one I would totally buy. Super interesting!! You might want to explain a little, just a little more about the star people.
Will you get any more chapters???

Jacqueline Lorraine Conwe Tuesday, 9 October 2012
I like how I was able to see the character standing in the field holding the jar, waiting for something to happen. This is a book I'd definitely purchase.
Scotty Sunday, 12 December 2010
Its pretty good, but the fight scene here kind of confused me, I wasn't exactly sure what was going on until the jar was opened. You also have a tendency to use loads of commas, many where they aren't needed. Maybe try to fix that. But I really like this!

Care to read my story, The One That Got Away? Thanks :}
Niko Bane Monday, 6 September 2010
Thanks for the reviews! Remember this story has a sequel called "Clash of The Titans".

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