The Past, The Model & The Future
GenreDrama
Age Rating:R13
Submitted:Wednesday, 14 April 2010
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(8 ratings)
Read by:157 different readers
 

Saphy, a.k.a, Model Mannequin, has a divorce her husband and gets an abortion for her second child. She goes in search of a job, and ends up with modelling. But when she makes a mistake in a show, she kills herself by overdose of drug use. Now, it is upto her daughter to save her career and the fashion show as show stopper.

 

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Ch. 0 Prologue

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art Friday, 18 February 2011
i really like it, i love the last paragraph very discriptive, looking forward too reading more, i appreciate your feed back hope to see more...
 
littlemisswriter123 Friday, 25 June 2010
Hi,

Sorry, I realized that you previously asked me to read/rate your book but I never got the chance to so here it is:

It's actually a really touching chapter. It kinda made me feel sad for what the woman is going through, even I don't know much about her yet. The grammar is actually really good and you only had like 1 or 2 spelling mistakes (you kept writing REALISED but its REALIZED with a Z). But other than that, its totally fine. Just add a bit more description for the husband (like his eyes were blood-shot and his teeth were stained yellow, something like that) but you give a perfect explanation of the woman, which is great and maybe if you added more description to the setting and stuff, you'd be perfectly fine. I also feel like the ending is kinda...abrupt. Maybe add a little more to the end of the chapter. But, besides those things, its an excellent start for what I feel is going to be a spectacular and interesting book!!

-littlemisswriter123
 
Bailey Ross Thursday, 15 April 2010
This is actually quite interesting. :D
 
XOXOchristine Thursday, 15 April 2010
i love it! i can't see any problems, haha but you probably know more about grammer cause your older then me :) but it's awesome!
 
. Thursday, 15 April 2010
woah, this is suspenseful! i really cant wait to read the rest and all there really needs is a bit more description, like what the others have suggested. but apart from that, it's a great read and im sure it'll be a great book!

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