Alethean Prophecy

Eryn Grayce Sorenson Thursday, 27 December 2012
The beginning was good, but the dialogue at the end was a bit much. You should have them do something as they talk (walking, tie their shoe, whatever) and you should also describe the place where they fell a bit more. I think this story has potential, however, so please continue.

Keep writing,
SingItForTheWorld Saturday, 2 October 2010
This is really good! the begining was the best, but it started to slip nearing the end. Alot of dialoge. You should do more disciption like in the begining. I loved it though! I can't wait to see what happens. It has alot of potential. Keep going!

If you have time, can you check out my story Flashback and my friend Flame's story Fire Trail? They are kind of what you like. Would you descibe people with powers like shapeshifting and a kid with wings magical creatures? Thanks so much!
Love2Read Friday, 4 June 2010
I brought it up to a 4.5. Nice!
Love2Read Friday, 4 June 2010
I don't agree with Count Cello's rating. I thought it was very description and vivid, just what you need to complete a chapter. Few errors- missed commas, spelling, and a few run-on sentences -but hey, you can always fix them. I really, really like it and I'm looking forward to reading some more. :) Write more?

*added to my favorites*

If you do have some time on your hands, could you read "One of His?" It may not be your kind of book though, however I do not know. I know you read "Blood, Sweat, and Tears" and I want to thank you for that. ;)

~Merisa ♥
Kimota Tuesday, 25 May 2010
Very Morbid

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