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The Beast in Me (completed)

 
kthaler Saturday, 20 July 2013
I found this entertaining. I loved it and was hooked right away. Great way to start this. If you could read, "Demon," I would really love feedback on it. Thanks and amazing job!!!
LittleAngel Saturday, 18 May 2013
Amazing loved it from the start, I definitely agree with the others :)
 
James Laurie Sunday, 14 April 2013
Wow, this is good. Short, but had the ability to draw me into the story off the start. I know I wont be able to stop reading this one. If you could check out "The Sanctuary" it would be much appreciated.
Pen Goddess Friday, 16 November 2012
I super agree with LOllie. This is what good stories should be, well descripted and can easily attract the readers. A big thumbs up for you :)))))
 
Lollie Wednesday, 4 November 2009
What a great beginning. Filled with emotion and brilliant descriptions. Your writing flows well and is easy to read. I'm adding this to my favorites
 
David Jae Saturday, 1 March 2014
I like Byron. He's a very 'real' character with a good deal of humanity and a darker side, too. Some of your dialogue needs punching up, but this is an enjoyable story.

Ganbare.
 
Sam Barclay Thursday, 30 May 2013
I really enjoyed the prologue too! I especially liked the main character and the dialogue is very effective also with great moments of humour such as the bit about the dog and every dog being a bit spoiled in Chapter 1. Touches likes this add an extra layer to characters for sure.
 
Half-Blood Princess Sunday, 6 January 2013
That was really good. Your main character is very likeable, which I think is important in a story. You are definitely a talented writer.

I'd love it if you'd check out my story, too.
 
Becca Lathorn Saturday, 14 November 2009
Wow, the prologue really got me. You obviously have a talent for descripting emotion! You might want to add a little more physical description though.
SamyJo Monday, 15 October 2012
*almost
SamyJo Monday, 15 October 2012
Dude...I didn't understand almist ANYTHING of what Frank said to that kid... o_e
 
Daleina Tuesday, 20 October 2009
Bra bok, ser framemot fortsättning.
SamyJo Monday, 15 October 2012
So I'm quite enjoying this book. :) There's been a couple of points where sentenves were put together weirdly and didn't make sense or slightly contradicting moments in the story, but not too bad. The only advice I can give is to make his flashbacks a little more clear to the reader. Whe he was thinking about the cafeteria scene, I had thought it just skipped forward into the next day at school, not gone back into his memories. And the whole part where he was looking back into his memories for the hairclip was a bit long and over-detailed/explained, I think. The whole situation is cool, but it was a bit tiring to read. This may all just be me, though, so don't take any offemse to it, I just thought I'd put my two cents in. :)
But the idea of all of his new abilites is really cool, and even if he can run wicked fast now and his memory is ridiculous, it's not so far-fetched that it's unbelievable or laughable. Just cool. :)
Well, I'm off to the next chapter! Can hardly wait for Sheena to appear (then Ron can stop sweating all the literal small stuff with Mandy!).
A Sparkle And A Twirl Saturday, 17 March 2012
This isn't the type of genre that I'd usually write or read, but this is extremely well-written and a work of art. Great job. :)
 
Lollie Monday, 9 November 2009
This is a great story, I hope you will add more soon. Great job!
 
Lollie Monday, 9 November 2009
This is a great story, I hope you will add more soon. Great job!
 
weylyn Monday, 29 November 2010
l loved reading and i was sad when i had to stop add more soon.
 
weylyn Thursday, 17 February 2011
please write more i'm on my knees begging. it's that good of a book.
LCD Sunday, 3 July 2011
Author's note:

Nice to see that some of you out there are following Ron's and Sheena's fate quite closely!

As the story winds up to its resolution in the following... any speculations on you, readers, side as to Ron's father or Zeus' identity, etc.?

Not that any of this should already be blatantly obvious, but just some fun feedback from you, if you like. I have written up a summary (that I'm not giving away yet, of course) of the final chapters, so there's no risk of "distorting" my script by commenting...

Stay tuned.

Yours, LCD
 
M. E. Haze Friday, 15 July 2011
Also! I updated One and Only True Love in case you were interested. The supernatural element is getting more involved in a spiritual element.
 
M. E. Haze Wednesday, 13 July 2011
....Epic. MORE PLEASE.
LCD Friday, 18 November 2011
Author's note:

Well folks, if you're looking for some action: read this.

Yours,
LCD
LCD Wednesday, 27 June 2012
Author's comment:
Needed to weed out some inconsistencies concerning the historical events at the hospital...

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