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Basic Instincts

 
OkamiWolf Saturday, 21 September 2013
So far so good! The idea of doing journal entries is a cool idea and you did good on writing his thoughts, just make sure you keep it up. Right now I can't see the plot of the story but I will read on to find out!
 
OkamiWolf Saturday, 28 September 2013
Another good chapter! Good job at writing about his feelings. I don't like writing diaries so I can connect to him their and though he does seem to have some anger issues you can tell he really cares about his family. Keep up the good work!
 
Rocky Rochford Tuesday, 8 October 2013
Loving the story so far, absolutely nothing wrong with it, amazing. I look forwards to more.

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