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The High Queen Sorceress (complete)

 
surfingpanda7 Saturday, 22 December 2012
great descriptions, really vivid and poetic. the topic and plot is interesting and i will watch for more books to be posted.
 
Bob Craton Sunday, 9 September 2012
Excellent first chapter. The male/anti-female dynamic is powerfully dramatic. I'll say more when I've read the rest.
 
stewartcnd Saturday, 8 September 2012
This was a very interesting, well written book. I would love to see more books from this author.
 
ConnieM Saturday, 8 September 2012
Unique and interesting. Characters are developed very well - feels like you know them. Will watch for more books from this author.
 
David Jae Wednesday, 5 February 2014
This is good. I like how you set up the story and your characters are interesting. The story is engaging and keeps the reader interested.

Sometimes, there is too much exposition or description which makes it tedious in places, but this is a minor point.

Ganbare.
 
Bob Craton Sunday, 9 September 2012
Wow again. Do start a new paragraph every time a different character speaks, though.
 
Eryn Grayce Sorenson Monday, 3 December 2012
I really really love this. You are so descriptive without being boring about it. The writing is so good it should be considered poetry, the characters are well developed and simply marvelous, and the plot development is absolutely stunning. There may be a few grammatical mistakes but nothing that really distracted from the story. You have a work of art here. Keep it up.
 
Bob Craton Sunday, 9 September 2012
This is excellent and I am fascinated. Well developed characters and great writing style. Having chapters about different characters and plot-lines which eventually merge together makes this my kind of story (literally).
I'm also impressed that you posted 16 chapters at once. That is unusual on this website and obviously this isn't a rough draft. I did see a few typos but nothing significant. Remember what I said earlier about paragraphs. It's a little difficult to follow who is saying what at times. That's easily correctable, however, and it seems like a small critique compared to the overall powerful effect of this story.
Congratulations, you have something great here.

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