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The Fractured Grey

 
Eryn Grayce Sorenson Thursday, 11 October 2012
This. Is. Epic. There were no errors whatsoever! Amazing job! Your descriptions really sucked me into the story and I'm already really into the characters. I can't wait to find out what happens next!
 
Caela Kings Sunday, 20 May 2012
This is... really good. Your description is flawless, your storytelling simply wonderful. I quite love how you have the fey in this--they make amazing stories! Especially when in historical fiction. ^_^ very interesting indeed.
 
Scarlette Noelle Sunday, 13 May 2012
Thanks for commenting on my story :D 'tis appreciated~!

Anyway, you have major talent ^u^ The only thing I didn't like was the use of present tense, but I just prefer past. Your writing is excellent and you used the present tense admirably :D This is a really great story. It kind of reminds me of the Dresden Files with their Winter and Summer courts in the fae.
 
Jenny M. Tuesday, 1 May 2012
Hi :) first off thank you for rating and commenting on my new book! I really appreciate it and I will use your advice.
Second of all, this story is insane! I just love it, both your style of writing as well as your descriptions really caught my attention! Well Done! Please , please continue writing it, I really want to know what happens next :)
 
Mal. 902 Tuesday, 1 May 2012
I have to read the rest to when I get more of a chance. but, so far the details are really good, the story so far I haven't got up to the actions but when I do I'll give you more of an update.
Ash Fitz Sunday, 29 April 2012
hi! Thank you for your kind words on my writing. To be honest, this is not exactly my cup of tea, but I very much enjoyed it and I thought it was incredibly well-written. Cheers :)
 
ImaginationIsKey Monday, 16 April 2012
Alright, thank you for clearing that up. :) I can't wait to read more! Thank you as well for taking time to comment on my book, and I can't wait to see the published version! :3 Thank you for all the help! I can't wait to read more ^_^
Lady Coldfeather Monday, 16 April 2012
ImaginationIsKey

You are completely welcome! :)

Yep, I really don't blame you for that. Basically, I begin this book with very little explanation - you are purely seeing everything through Cas' eyes. And what she chooses to reveal depends completely on the relevance of the situation. It essentially just complies with the general rule that when you're in one place, taking in the situation, or talking to someone, you're not going to be summing up the entire history of your life in that moment.
It all comes in snippets and gradually so, and when the initial confusion lifts you'll be able to appreciate the mystery and suspense a little more - I hope! :)

After the next few chapters I post, the pace is noticably slower, because by this point I will have established what I need to.

For these two chapters and the two following (which will be uploaded tomorrow), it is all very political, violent and teeming with, well, a lot of emotion. It will be pretty puzzling, and throughout the course of the novel there will be continously some new thread to throw off all previous conceptions...so feel free to email me at any time if you feel like I haven't explain a scene right and you need intel :)

Thank you for your lovely words, and taking the time to leave your opinion :)

I intend to try to get published at some point in the future, but only when I feel I'm really, truly good enough.
 
ImaginationIsKey Monday, 16 April 2012
First off, thank you so much for the constructive critsism on my book. :)

Second of all, I am absoloutley in love with this book! I love how detailed it is! I can toatlly imagine the exact details in my mind. My only complaint is that I'm a bit confused, but that might just be because I am younger than the approved rating.

Thank you for all the help, and you should try to get this published! It's amazing!

Have an awesome day, and keep writing! :D
 
April_Parr Monday, 16 April 2012
This is exactly my kind of story. I don't have much online time so I've had to copy it on a doc. so I could read it at home, but I LOVE it. If this was a book, it would definately be on my "to buy" list. I love stories that have to do with fairies and spirits, so this fits in well with what I write myself. Thank you much for the review by the way, it makes me happy to know people are reading.
 
JustAWriter Sunday, 15 April 2012
Review complete! Check it out on Book Reviews by TKSK
I wish there was more that 5 stars. Really really hoping there is more coming soon XX
Lily M. Tuesday, 3 July 2012
This is so amazing!
I can't wait to read more, I'll read the rest whenever I can!

Could you please read, rate and comment on my book?
Lady Coldfeather Monday, 16 April 2012
Thank you, everyone, for your kind and boosting words - I can't tell you enough how happy I am for them. I hope to carry on producing more pieces for you to enjoy :)
 
Bob Craton Sunday, 15 April 2012
I really like your writing style. It's far above most of the stuff on this website. I also like the way your began - jumping right into the story without any background narrative. Gradually figuring out exactly who the characters are and where (or when) they live is much more entertaining. It has been a long time since I qualified as a 'young adult' but based on these two chapters, I think this will be interesting to some of us oldsters too.
P.S. Thank you for reviewing my book. 'Jesika's Angel' was my first attempt at writing. I think (or at least hope) I improved as time went by. 'Journey to Light' which is also posted is the beginning excerpt from a longer and more complex story.
 
Karl Thompson Saturday, 5 May 2012
Hi Lady Coldfeather.
First off thank you for taking the theim to read and comment on my book, it is comments like that that keep me writing.
I absolutly love you book. Your use of description is just outstanding, i wish i could use as much as you and in such minute detail too. Bravo :)
The plot line is fantastic too, every paragraph just has me clambering for more.
Very well done, i'm looking forward to the remaining chapers :)
 
Bob Craton Thursday, 19 April 2012
P.S. to note below: LOL - sounding like an expert when I'm just another amateur is fun. Makes me feel like I'm more mature. (That may seem like a laugh line since I'm 64, but a lot of people still tell me I should grow up.)
 
Bob Craton Thursday, 19 April 2012
Nice uncomplicated books are easy. That why millions of them have already been written. Maintaining continuity in a long story is difficult but worth it. I can't tell you how many times I had to go back and change things previously written so they would be consistent with newer passages. Sometimes your ideas about plot lines change and other times characters take on a life of their own. In particular, Caelia told me I needed to changes some things I had already composed about her. (I'm speaking metaphorically. I don't really hear the voices of fictional characters in my head.)
Anyway, you're already doing the right thing. Keep writing for a while and then come back to this passage. That's definitely the thing to do.
And remember, sweet fluffy faeries are an old stereotype. Sneaky sinister ones are something new.
Lady Coldfeather Thursday, 19 April 2012
Yes, I do :/ I will revisit it when I have more clarity further down the line. I've had to make so many notes for everything it's unreal. I should really just write a nice uncomplicated book about good faeries NOT embroiled in sinister political plots haa...what are your thoughts Bob?
 
Bob Craton Wednesday, 18 April 2012
You don't really think something is wrong with Chapter 3, do you?
 
Sarah Humble Thursday, 10 May 2012
It was long, but I enjoyed it! ;) Keep at it!
Lady Coldfeather Thursday, 26 April 2012
Ah, I'd best rectify that soon before I slip into the habit of using both terms, I can see myself making the mistake! Thanks for the heads up Bob, glad you're enjoying the story! :)
 
Bob Craton Tuesday, 24 April 2012
Totally trivial point: rapiers and sabres are two different types of swords. Her weapon should be one or the other, not both (and technically 'sabre sword' is redundant).
Even though this is a draft, I still love it.

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