The plot sounds good but what is stopping me is the script write out of the book. It looks as if lots of people think this by the looks of things. You should really thing about writing regular, or learning to if you don't know how to...

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It's a different way to write novels.. It's more like a script.. But other than that: am interesting beginning!

Well thank you two for the reviews. I appreciate the glowing and constructive criticism given as well. Its nice to know that everyone writes brilliant, often world changing stories though.
To J.B.: I don't know how to write "regular". I script to draw it later.

As a book, I don't think even a drunk man would publish it. As a script, it's terrible.

As a book, I don't think even a drunk man would publish it. As a script, it's terrible.

you should've wrote it as a book and not a script cause a book is easier to read