Comments
Piercing The Sky, A Book of My Poems

 
John T. Goodman Friday, 27 June 2014
You ask me to post a comment I see.
I will tell you what I think and leave you be.
What I have to tell are three:
The first is simply you mustn't be so sad; maybe if you write about the sun you wouldn't feel so bad.
The second I am glad to say, is that your skill is worth your strain.
The third it to keep it up my friend, for a bright future might be your end.
 
BeanieGirl123 Friday, 7 June 2013
I must say I love your poems so much! I'm a poet myself and it's funny because I started when I had my first ever panic attack. So the way you started is similar to the way I started. :)
Keep writing please!
Ellie Mitchells Sunday, 24 March 2013
Wow, ok, without even reading any of your poems, I read your summary first. It is so deep! I wish I could open up like that! I can tell that your poems will be worthwhile to read, even if you think some of them are awful.
If you can, please come and read my little poem book. It's not as grand as yours (there's only five!), but I think your opinion would be valuable. I think I have more potential as a writer than a poet, but I could be wrong!
~Ellie
katiealyssa. Wednesday, 27 July 2011
Poetry is what you're feeling coming out onto paper. It's all your hate, love, sadness, and everything else being poured out for others to see. Every poem is beautiful because it comes from you, and nothing else. That's what poetry is to me.
 
Alice in Paramore Wednesday, 23 March 2011
I think poetry is a secret champer in your heart that not even you could uncover until writing it down.

Oh, and I love your poems! ^_^
 
A.E. Eidem Thursday, 16 December 2010
My English teacher today quoted some old guy who said something a long the lines of "poetry is the flow of only the best words"
Ha, that's the best I got.
 
A.E. Eidem Thursday, 16 December 2010
My English teacher today quoted some old guy who said something a long the lines of "poetry is the flow of only the best words"
Ha, that's the best I got.
Brooke Ketchum Monday, 11 November 2013
You are a very good poet Neil. I'm looking forward to reading and traveling along on your journeys the poetry takes me. If you would be so kind as to take a look at my poetry book as well, that would be great. c:
Steve R. Saturday, 22 June 2013
Neil, you are a very insightful young poet. An individual that it appears experiences a lot of darkness in their life. I thought you poem was well thought out, especially being your first one. Just remember, when you look into the Abyss, the Abyss will look into you. Keep writing...Great Job
 
Katrina Brady/spirit Tuesday, 5 March 2013
It's very thought provoking! Living a life of fear is not really living.
nUmBeR_oNe_ReAdEr_Of_ThE_ Wednesday, 20 June 2012
is this about death and maybe someone important in your life has died?
 
Dan Edwards Wednesday, 19 October 2011
I like these poems. (Your intro reminds me of me. I only have two poems right now.)
 
________ Friday, 30 September 2011
An intriguing/thought provoking question. I think we tend to fear the pain we often associate with death rather than death itself, but thinking sensibly, death in itself is the end of our pain, our lives, and just about everything we are. People with unfulfilled lives fear leaving the world too soon and cowards fear death because it's the greatest of unknowns. We can only speculate what lies beyond and what it all means, but fearing death is as natural as fearing life. Long-winded analysis (sorry)but I loved this piece. Well done.
Paige Slee Thursday, 4 August 2011
i really like this poem, i will definately keep reading more :)
 
_flemmers_ Sunday, 8 May 2011
i really like this poem. its really and i think you have a real talent.
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
Not bad. And trust me this is not long. I'll deffinatly keep reading. You've got talent my friend. Stick with it. (:
A.K. Loberiano Monday, 28 February 2011
It's like dark or something, but, not bad.
 
Choco-milkshake Sunday, 26 December 2010
Not bad for a first time.

And it's not even long, you made it sound like lines and lines of poetry.

:P

You're saying that death would find us in the end, right?
 
Na<3mi B. Saturday, 18 December 2010
I really like this one, I don't really get the feeling that it's too long, because most of my poems can be much longer. But I enjoyed it, and I don't think the rhyming is forced at all.
 
Kari.Ann. Thursday, 1 July 2010
This is Absolutely Amazing. You have some really great talent.
 
Capitalletters Friday, 25 June 2010
Beautiful.
 
Bianca Cambell Friday, 25 June 2010
This really good i love it! keep writing! Can you read my book please i only have one chapter but im working on the second. Trying to get a lot of readers but i promise i will keep reading yours!
 
Love2Read Friday, 25 June 2010
It is definitely interesting(: Couple lines don't really make sense in this poem, however poetry is poetry, right? There is one piece of advice that you should take into consideration--be confident about your work! If you don't like your work then others won't(: I learned that lesson the hard way, lol.
 
huzu Tuesday, 25 December 2012
no serious poetic thought behind the poem(s)
black fire night Tuesday, 11 December 2012
I like your book so far I can't wait to read some more. :) and if you don't mind me asking you and those who read this comment
Do you wish to find love?
Do you have money troubles?
Do you wish you could fine something to make you feel beautiful?
Do wish to be free or change your fait?
Do you want to be successful or lucky soon?
If you said yes to any of the following please visit my books. :) I hope that all you want will come true :)
Anayellow Sunday, 20 May 2012
I thought you killed her! I like it!
 
Lady Coldfeather Friday, 6 April 2012
Definitely a lot of icy wrath...short but to the point. Is "dead" open to interpretation?
 
Darren A Daly Wednesday, 27 April 2011
Good, perhaps too dark
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
Hmm. This ones ok. Not sure how I feel about swears in poetry, but I can feel anger. Which is a good thing.
 
Choco-milkshake Sunday, 26 December 2010
I loved the first two lines. Maybe it would help to add a dash between the two 'just' words.

It wouldn't hurt to add more substance to the middle part (3rd->7th).
GreenMonkey2652 Tuesday, 7 December 2010
Yeah, I agree with Stephan Delee, curse words aren't annoying or distracting; they're just words. Just because people use them to insult, doesn't make them anything less than what they are; words. Neil, cussing can make you're poetry stronger when used right, as you did, I like the poem and how you wrote it, it's a unique style. My critism is I don't like the last line. Just how is is I dunno, but yeah:P I like your style of poems though, it's kinda how I write mine, and once I repost my books and poems, you should check em out:)
 
Stephen Delee Tuesday, 14 September 2010
E. C. Schroeder, James Joyce (and Bukowski, and all of the Beat poets) often employed vulgarity in their poetry (and Shakespeare in his plays--cf King Lear); the connotative force of curse words isn't a distraction from the main point (or whatever from which it's distracting), but rather a bold and pithy augmentation thereto.
Neil Evans Wednesday, 1 September 2010
Thank you for the comment, E. C., I realize vulgarity can be annoying in poems. I am trying to expand my vocabulary to kick the habit of dropping F bombs, B words, ect. Thank you for pointing that out, though, as I need to know what is distracting, annoying, what readers do not want, rather than all of the praise I get.
 
E. C. Schroeder Tuesday, 31 August 2010
I don't think you should use vulgar or curse words in poetry. It's distracting.
 
Kari.Ann. Thursday, 1 July 2010
Wow. Beautiful.
 
Laz Monday, 4 August 2014
Simple but so strong!
 
M. E. Haze Tuesday, 19 July 2011
It's defiantly a poem, it's just free verse. Free verse poems are some of the strongest poems though also! You should check out my poems in my book titled Poetry. They are all free verse.
 
LittleMissWitch Saturday, 30 April 2011
Hey your pretty talented here!
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
If you want it to be a poem, it is.

Sorry I I comment on everything. I'm just weird like that. (:
 
Na<3mi B. Saturday, 18 December 2010
Poems don't have to rhyme to be poems. Do whatever the hell you want!
stormy no-one Monday, 12 July 2010
It's a poem if you want it to be a poem.

For the first two, I could see that they were full of potential, but I just thought you were trying a little too hard. For Pandora's Box, I think it's more believable.
 
Kari.Ann. Thursday, 1 July 2010
Hmm, Interesting, Not My Favorite, But Great Still.
 
Skye Emerson Friday, 15 November 2013
I really love this so much.
 
Capitalletters Monday, 5 December 2011
Beautiful, I had to read it again!
 
M. E. Haze Tuesday, 19 July 2011
I like this poem. I can feel the emotion you put in your words.
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
In my opinion, your first ones are better. And Poetry is simply taking every strong emotion, every angry, happy, frustrated, depressing, joyus, thought and putting it down on paper. THAT'S what poetry is.
 
Choco-milkshake Sunday, 26 December 2010
To tell you the truth, I felt that this poem came out flat.

It's not that important to write imagery and all kinds of poetry crap, you just need to write your feelings in a more upfront way.

This poem is lacking feeling.
 
Na<3mi B. Saturday, 18 December 2010
Poetry is taking your soul and putting it onto paper with pen and ink. It's something done to release feelings, stress, lust, hormones, greed, everything. It's everything and anything. It's you.
 
A.E. Eidem Sunday, 12 December 2010
I <3 your poems awesome job!
GreenMonkey2652 Tuesday, 7 December 2010
*If the writer wrote a poem...
(sorry bout that)
GreenMonkey2652 Tuesday, 7 December 2010
If YOU don't believe it's poetry, then it's not. Poetry is simply how the writer feels. If the writing wrote a poem just because he was told to, that's not a poem. A poem is any bundle of words put together into something the writer feels deeply about. It's only poetry if there's emotion.
 
E. C. Schroeder Tuesday, 31 August 2010
It sounds more like the lyrics to a song. That's why you probably don't think of it as a poem, but it's still, technically, "poetry".

And for your question "what is poetry", I'll tell you what I think it is. I think poetry is our thoughts, our actions, our hearts and our souls, our SELVES, inside a string of words. All those words are inside us, and if we want to write real poetry, we have to pull them out from our soul and add a little spice to it.
stormy no-one Monday, 12 July 2010
I can't tell you why you don't think your poetry is any good. As far as I'm concerned, all poetry is great if the writer wrote it from the heart.

I see Number Four as someone needing emotion - any emotion at all - just so they can feel. Sweet and simple.
 
Kari.Ann. Thursday, 1 July 2010
Ohh, I Love This One!
 
Skye Emerson Friday, 15 November 2013
This is also so amazing
katiealyssa. Wednesday, 27 July 2011
I'm in love with this. The one thing I would suggest, though, is punctuation.
For example:

As I lie here crying in my bed[,]
My vision is leaving me[.]
But that's okay[,]
Because I don't want to see[.]

Get what I mean? But your work is so good. There's so much emotion in it. I have a collection of poems that I write saved in a Word document, and I want to put them on here, but I'm scared. So I also give you props for putting your feelings out for everyone here to see. (:

 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
THIS IS SO MUCH BETTER THAN THE LAST ONE. Honestly. I have no criticism for this one. Free verse <3
 
Choco-milkshake Sunday, 26 December 2010
This one's much better than the last, I just didn't understand the last line.

 
A.E. Eidem Sunday, 12 December 2010
this sounds like a song...
u know the one "the final countdown"
i can just hear it "the final thankyou"
lol pretty dern good!
 
E. C. Schroeder Tuesday, 31 August 2010
Again, it sounds like a song. I can almost hear the tune in the back of my head.
stormy no-one Monday, 12 July 2010
I really enjoyed this one.

I know it's free verse, but Final Thank You seems to flow easier than the others so far, so I'd like to suggest something I was suggested a long time ago: if you are going for a more fluid poem, try to keep the lines relatively the same length. Excess words can throw it off. You did a good job with this.

The story this piece depicts is forward and to the point, and I'm sure we've all felt like this before.
 
Kari.Ann. Thursday, 1 July 2010
This One Had To be My Favorite Though, I guess because I've felt like that before.
 
bre Monday, 24 February 2014
you've got skills my friend own it with confidence.
 
Skye Emerson Friday, 15 November 2013
I'm going to stop commenting because I love them all, but I feel the emotion while reading this.
 
Izzy Hartley Wednesday, 25 January 2012
I really like this one. It has quite a meaning behind it.
 
Hanna Clicton Thursday, 19 January 2012
This poem book is very. . . Touching. Ah, yes, there was a better word I was looking for, but oh well. Truly amazing, Neil, truly. When you ask what poetry is, I have an answer for you.

Poetry is whatever you make of it. Wether it is sad or happy, it's whatever you think is right. :)
Think about it.
It's not just about throwing rhyming words together, it's about giving others the same feeling you felt when writing it. :)
Thanks for making this.
Check out my book, "Falling."
Paige Slee Thursday, 4 August 2011
i really like this one :)
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
This one is pretty good. The rhyming is cute.
 
TezzMilo Tuesday, 27 July 2010
I really like this one!(:
 
Kari.Ann. Thursday, 15 July 2010
This one is Great, I like it.
 
Fanatic Wednesday, 18 April 2012
*Cries* I love this poem *sniffles* it's really touching... I imgained a guy I like saying it to me which is why I cried a little lol
Check out my book called sparks in the Ashes please :)
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
Agree with A.E. Eidem.
This was really deep and sweet. Keep it up hun. (:
 
Na<3mi B. Saturday, 18 December 2010
Dude, marry me. lol just kidding! :P
 
A.E. Eidem Sunday, 12 December 2010
Wow. One day you are going to make a girl fall into your arms with poetry like this! Awesome!
 
Kari.Ann. Thursday, 15 July 2010
That was Deep...I liked it.
 
ffand Tuesday, 28 December 2010
This is actually one of my favourites from you. I like it because it is simple and REAL. Nothing contrived in it - everyone can relate to it.
 
Choco-milkshake Sunday, 26 December 2010
You're getting better and better ;)

I can see your earnest feelings. I guess all poets suffer from one-sided love.

You're good enough for her, just because you love her.
 
A.E. Eidem Sunday, 12 December 2010
when i read poetry i guess the next line
"in my head" sounded cool after replaying them over, and over
 
TezzMilo Tuesday, 27 July 2010
But i think you cld put a lil more into it, and have it lil flow. But i really like it(:
 
TezzMilo Tuesday, 27 July 2010
I love this one!
 
Kari.Ann. Thursday, 15 July 2010
This one I liked, but it didn't exactly draw me in.
Jessica C. Wewer Sunday, 26 August 2012
This poem flows very nice and I like how you bounce back and forth. Good work!
Dr. Rhyme Tuesday, 22 November 2011
These poems are good. All you have to do is keep writing. I have been writing for 18 years now and i still don't feel as if i have mastered it. It is just like anything else, practice makes perfect.
 
Victoria G. Friday, 1 July 2011
love the ending!!!
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
This was really personal. Great. (:
 
Anya Scott Monday, 21 February 2011
this was a really good poem. i think you're a good poet :)
 
Choco-milkshake Sunday, 26 December 2010
I loved 'Be Careful'.

The first two lines gave me a chill :P

Just think of a better last line, it felt like a let-down.
 
Na<3mi B. Saturday, 18 December 2010
That actually makes my heart beat reallly fast. It also gives me that weird stomach feeling when you "like" someone. Haha, great job. I like it.
 
A.E. Eidem Sunday, 12 December 2010
Nice.
 
Kari.Ann. Thursday, 15 July 2010
Oh, Nice. I liked this one a lot.
 
Doomydoomdomm Monday, 4 July 2011
lol, a little obvious.
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
It's ok.
And if you read the first letters of each line down it says LLSSDD.
(:
GabbiJ Tuesday, 15 February 2011
Im gonna take a wild guess and say LSD. lol
 
A.E. Eidem Sunday, 12 December 2010
Let Me? good, like all the others.
 
Stephen Delee Tuesday, 14 September 2010
the couplet form kinda detracts from the emotion and sincerity of the poem--especially when in superfluous lines.. I quite like what I've read so far of your collection, but this one feels a tad contrived with the short lines and couplet rhyme
 
Kari.Ann. Thursday, 15 July 2010
Hmm, Interesting, I don't quite know what to make of this one.
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
this is amazing.
I hope this special someone sees the talent you have.
And don't be too hard on yourself.
GabbiJ Tuesday, 15 February 2011
omygod. you wrote this on my birthday.
i know u really don't care, but i just love this poem.and when you become famous, i'll say that u wrote this on my birthday,
i love it. :)
 
Choco-milkshake Sunday, 26 December 2010
I loved it, I know I said this before but again, much has improved.

The speed at which you're improving is admirable :)

I hope she liked this, 'cause this is just touching~
 
A.E. Eidem Sunday, 12 December 2010
it's like frost flakes ... its geer-rate!
Angelic-Wolf Friday, 7 January 2011
Not if they read the comment ;) jk

I like how you put that though. I knew what you mean't by it because I see girls who think they're fat and ugly due to what others say but in reality they're the complete opposite.
 
A.E. Eidem Monday, 13 December 2010
yeah i can see how you get that but girls who are very... whats the word... unconfident would take it the wrong way
Neil Evans Sunday, 12 December 2010
It's saying that people call her fat and ugly, but in reality, she's not at all, she's beautiful, if not to anyone else, at least to me.
 
A.E. Eidem Sunday, 12 December 2010
ahh, okay im sure you had the best intetntions but if you give this to girl it sounds like "ur fat, but i think your beautiful"
A little offensive? But nice.
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
I like this one. (:
I'm a sucker for metaphors i admit it.
 
A.E. Eidem Monday, 13 December 2010
Understood now.
Neil Evans Sunday, 12 December 2010
This one is about being stuck between 2 girls, then a third comes into the equation and knocks me head over heels.
 
A.E. Eidem Sunday, 12 December 2010
I don't quite understand this one?
saqlain Saturday, 8 June 2013
umm hey, i do poetry myself

i think your poems are wayyyy too short...im 15 btw...
if ur poems would be longer,they would have more flavour....which would be great....i do poetry myself...
 
A.E. Eidem Sunday, 12 December 2010
Like :p
Sarah Humble Monday, 28 November 2011
I love your poems! Truly inspiriring! But I do however have slight criticism- it's your endings. They always end the same and I'd wish you change it up a little. :)
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
I really really hope this girl appreciates all of this work. Because honey, you're an INCREDIBLE poet. *I call everyone honey, sweetie, hun ect.ect. *
 
Liz Devereaux Sunday, 13 February 2011
You're very talented. I read a few of your poems in this collection, but this is my favorite.
 
A.E. Eidem Sunday, 12 December 2010
OMG I LOVED THIS ONE! Awesome! You should so like publish a book of your poetry!! Ah-mazin. I love love love this one like seriously.
Breann Bennett Friday, 6 September 2013
I never saw this comment I will post it ASAP
Neil Evans Monday, 24 October 2011
As long as you send me the video of you singing it!
Breann Bennett Wednesday, 28 September 2011
can i please please please sing this on my youtube
 
A.E. Eidem Sunday, 12 December 2010
awesome as well. sorry im not critisising but i luv em all
katiealyssa. Wednesday, 27 July 2011
I like the questions and repeating "today's." I feel like it gives it more voice. That's just me.
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
It's alright. It is a little repetative, like if you broke up the lines with a sentance in between it would be better.
But I'm sorry things didn't work out. ): I'm really sorry.
 
A.E. Eidem Sunday, 12 December 2010
It's good just kinda said, and not as good as some of the others. and its okat to have repetitives if thts the style of the poem
 
TezzMilo Tuesday, 27 July 2010
Yes, that's true. But it makes since. & it's deep. I would say if you put sentences between them, it wldnt be as bad(:
Neil Evans Wednesday, 21 July 2010
This one's a bit . . . eh, well, I'm going to straight out and say it's not good. I used the word "today" too many times. . . .
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
Yay! I was wrong things worked out. *happy happy!*
GabbiJ Tuesday, 15 February 2011
That's..one lucky girl...
 
A.E. Eidem Sunday, 12 December 2010
wonderful
katiealyssa. Wednesday, 27 July 2011
"Watch you bleed just like a goat." Hehe I laughed. This one is morbid, but it's, of course, amazing.

To avoid awkward rhyming, though, you could try to rhyme every other line? Or don't ryhme at all. Just choose words that sound good together. If that makes any sense.
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
This is gold. It's how I would feel if I found out something like that happened to my friend. But the goat thing did bother me... Hmmm... I wonder why. I'm not sure? But it captured the emotion. Well done.
Angelic-Wolf Friday, 7 January 2011
This one gave me chills. Greatly written though, I could feel the emotion.
 
Na<3mi B. Saturday, 18 December 2010
I actually started smiling during this one. That's exactly how I feel when I'm mad.
 
Sc3arlett Sketch Wednesday, 15 December 2010
This is really really good o.e But the thing I need to criticize just a bit was the part with 'Watch you bleed just like a goat'. Mur. It bothered me. I think it'd be pretty cool if you instead said, 'Watch you bleed til the world needs a boat'? I don't know. I'm a terrible poet xD But everything else is absolutely amazing. Keep writing m'dear.
 
A.E. Eidem Monday, 13 December 2010
oh, i understand. one of my close friends was raped. i was really mad 2.
Neil Evans Sunday, 12 December 2010
This one is about someone who raped a close friend of mine. What I had wanted to do to them. Only come to find out later he never did anything...
 
A.E. Eidem Sunday, 12 December 2010
did your aphrodite reject you? or something? very sad, and violentical.
 
TezzMilo Tuesday, 27 July 2010
i actually LOVE this one. It flows very nicely. & it's very deep(: this one so far is actually my favorite!:D
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
So things didn't work out? D: I'm sorry. ):
 
Na<3mi B. Saturday, 18 December 2010
Very goood. I like it.
 
M.R.K. Wednesday, 29 December 2010
This would make a great song, like Thicket said. Kind of dark but it leaves a lot to imagine. Really cool.
 
Raspberry Thicket Tuesday, 27 July 2010
That was fantastic, would look great in a song.
GabbiJ Tuesday, 15 February 2011
Anything that came from you heart is amazing. Poets are just like that. :)
Neil Evans Sunday, 19 December 2010
I'm no better, you're a great poet, and I love your work, I just write so much quantity, there's bound to be ONE good work in there :P
 
Na<3mi B. Saturday, 18 December 2010
that's amazing. You're better then me, buddy.
Neil Evans Monday, 26 July 2010
Let's give it a try . . . I am rather amused at my own work, if I might say so. Haha, I hope you guys like it, because it came from my heart.
katiealyssa. Wednesday, 27 July 2011
I like the same ending with a little bit of a twist thing. It's almost like a bridge to a song.
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
Ok. This is my favorite. I love poems like this I really do. <3
It proves you don't need to rhyme to make poetry it's incredible.
I have no criticism for this one.
 
pan12 Thursday, 16 June 2011
love it..
 
Na<3mi B. Saturday, 18 December 2010
Beautiful. :)
 
Na<3mi B. Saturday, 18 December 2010
Beautiful. :)
 
cinnamon zombie Wednesday, 17 November 2010
the last line is really powerful. i can tell just by reading this how enamored you are/were. :P
emoluver4265 Sunday, 4 September 2011
i like these poems they are really deep.
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
Umm wow. Swearing in poems can make them more powerful I've decided. And umm yeah agreed it kind of was. (:
Neil Evans Sunday, 19 December 2010
Haha! :D
 
Na<3mi B. Saturday, 18 December 2010
That's kind of hot, actually.
 
Rocky Rochford Tuesday, 29 October 2013
Hey man good stuff, you have great depth to your poems, well worth reading. Any chance you could check out my poetry book:
The life of Little Boy Death.
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
Wow. I liked this. Except for the last line. I think it should have been.
I can't breathe,
Help me,
please.

But that's just my opinion. Powerful work. (:
John K. Dixon Saturday, 31 March 2012
I feel like this poem kinda describes the Greek god Bacchus! :D I love
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
Not sure what to think. I think it's about a confused angel (or person?) who just wants it to end but it won't end... Or they're indecisive about weather they want the end or not?
The poetry is lost in the translation. Always. /:
Neil Evans Sunday, 19 December 2010
Hm... Interesting... Thanks :D
 
Na<3mi B. Saturday, 18 December 2010
I think it's about an angel who's falling.
SolisCantio Thursday, 20 September 2012
This is just lovely. A very special someone to have this written for them. I applaud you!

Forever in pen,
Savannah
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
Wow. Just wow. You're an amzing person I hope you know that.
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
Ohmigod. I am sososo sorry about your friend. But that was touching. I can feel the anger and madness (don't worry madness is a good thing. We're all a little mad) anger creates the best art.
Neil Evans Sunday, 19 December 2010
Thank you very much Na<3mi B. for all the comments :D
 
Na<3mi B. Saturday, 18 December 2010
So deep, I felt that deep inside my chest.
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
Pretty good considering you don't like it. Cuz I do.
 
Jessica E Saturday, 20 November 2010
i like this one
 
tokiohotelfan Sunday, 15 January 2012
This is simply beautiful :D
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
True. Seriously.
 
tokiohotelfan Sunday, 15 January 2012
love this! one of my favorite poems ever!
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
Wow. This was incredible. I like how you start of being polite and then your just like I'm fed up with this bull. (: great job.
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
There should be a *like* button. Like there is on facebook.
 
NashedPotatoes. Wednesday, 16 March 2011
WE LOVE YOU TOO. I appolagize for my issues. I get too excited sometimes. n.n
 
NashedPotatoes. Monday, 28 March 2011
Wow this is great. You captured the emotion of breakup and regret. (:
 
A.E. Eidem Wednesday, 15 December 2010
okay i don't really use that word but nice poem, you can tell your tonee is mad!
Dark Phoenix Friday, 20 August 2010
That was FUCKING awesome
 
A.E. Eidem Monday, 13 December 2010
Someone sounds like a boy :p Jk.
 
Doomydoomdomm Monday, 4 July 2011
I Hate the Happiness is one of my favorites.
 
Rosey101 Thursday, 16 December 2010
I love it!! Its really amazing!
SolisCantio Thursday, 20 September 2012
You've quite a bit of talent. There are too many pieces here for me to read but I've picked out a few...and they're all good!

Forever in pen,
Savannah
Neil Evans Sunday, 12 December 2010
I understand this very well, and my apologies entirely for lack of punctuation.
 
Gwen Paz Saturday, 4 December 2010
Hi... I guess... I don't really know how to start this, but I figure since you're open to everything I would comment with this.

I love how in the beginning you would talk a little bit about the poems. It seemed to put a little bit of you in there. Which is weird rereading what I just said, but roll with it please.

But, my suggestion would be to put some punctuation into your newer poems, because it makes them really hard to read. Poems are to be read like actual sentences, not as lines, (I just found this out) and semicolons are like a period, and commas are just there for a pause for breath like anything else. It might help just a bit.
ashblogs Sunday, 4 June 2017
I love this
 
Likhitha Monday, 21 April 2014
nice ending!
 
pan12 Thursday, 16 June 2011
nice! i love this one..
HellOrGlory Sunday, 6 March 2011
This is so sad. I know how you feel. You're girlfriend is lucky to have a boyfriend that can write.
Neil Evans Saturday, 15 January 2011
It's about a girl I had a huge crush on. It would've never worked out, she would've never liked me... I'm not in any social groups, I don't have many friends, people don't like me in general. I still keep glancing at her and stuff and wish she'd like me like I liked her, but, as said in the poem, this ship already sailed. I'm dating someone now, even if they're not from the school. Sometimes, though, it hurts when you like someone so much and they don't know you exist...
 
Constance Branning Saturday, 15 January 2011
I like this one, it's very clear and brings up a point I'd not thought about before

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