Carter Bridges Friday, 12 February 2010
... sorry to tell you that this chapter seems way to cheesy... :3
Carter Bridges Friday, 12 February 2010
... sorry to tell you that this chapter seems way to cheesy... :3
 
Ripcode Saturday, 3 October 2009
Good, it got longer. Now try to slow down a bit. Then it will get much more interesting.
 
E.M. Wheeler Monday, 28 September 2009
sorry I am way confused I have no clue whats going on. Slow the story line down and edit you'll have a story. I love the plot or what u described the story as. I'm givin u four stars since its a good story just needs a lot of work :( sorry I hate to be rude keep at it you are doing an ok job i've read worst
 
Scarlet Blaze Wednesday, 22 July 2009
it's moving to fast.