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by Daru
Please note: this is an ongoing project for NaNoWriMo 09 and is expected to be between 50000 and 100000 words when it is finished, with a more precise, likely less accurate estimation of 60000 to 75000. In addition, as it is a work in progress, this synopsis is not entirely accurate. List of chapters
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Daru
Monday, November 16, 2009
Thanks for your constructive critism ^^ I know that there will definitely be sections requiring modification or outright removal, but that can wait until after NaNoWriMo. And Conchvegas, there's more action in the later chapters ;)
Your writing is impeccable. And if it isn't then I was pulled too deep into the story to notice. Skey has an attitude and is actually irritating me with her rudeness. But on the other hand, her none-caring quality is what makes her stand out in this story.
I agree with Conchvegas. It does get rather dull in the middle where they are playing the game. I actually skipped through that part because it dragged on and held very little interest for me. With the collars, I would definately like to get to know more about that. It's intriguing. Over all it was very enjoyable and I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Keep up the good work!
good start...I like your heroine, she has an attitude. It drags a little in middle, maybe a little too much time spent on introducing characters, setting. I guess I'm just used to action, but I certainly see promise in your story.
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