Alice In Wonderland (The Un-told version)
GenreFiction / Horror
Age Rating:R13
Submitted:Saturday, 8 August 2009
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(7 ratings)
Read by:281 different readers
 

Did Alice actually "fall" down the rabbit hole? Or was she...pushed?

 

List of chapters

Ch. 1 Down The Rabbit Hole
Ch. 2 The Pool Of Tears

Comments

 
Lavender Downs Sunday, 16 January 2011
I hope you realize this is kind of illegal, seeing as how you followed the book exactly in some passages (yes, I checked) and you didn'tgive credit to the original author. Where you do actually write for yourself I think it is pretty good but the rabbit getting killed then being back again and the mysterious evil looking dude was VERY hard to follow. I do like the creative-ness of how the weirdo gives her stuff to help her, though. I don't get the effects of her getting drunk. Was she just supposed to get small like in the book? Anyway, make some little improvements here and there (like mentioning the original author) and it'll be pretty good!
 
Zack D. Monday, 5 April 2010
This follows the original book WAY TOO MUCH!!!
Sorry, but it kinda follows it word for word. Just be a little more...creative.
~Zack
 
C.A.M Tuesday, 22 December 2009
Okay, I just realized that this follows the original book word for word. I would suggest writing it yourself, just keep the original flow and idea.
Because otherwise you can't publish it :)
 
C.A.M Monday, 21 December 2009
I love the idea of the drink making her drunk. haha it's great, but I would like to know, is she a child or a teenager? I don't know why, but it would help :)
Mikhaila Cartiers Friday, 14 August 2009
some places seemed to have to much description, but i liked it. I am still not sure how it relates to Alice like Lollie said. It was good. Keep writing.

Please check out my story (and rate it) when you get a chance. thx (:

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