Cold Water
GenreYoung Adult / Romance
Age Rating:PG
Submitted:Sunday, 26 July 2009
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(100 ratings)
Read by:1356 different readers
 

Hope Winters is nearly sixteen, and she's a full blown pessimist. Life just isn't worth it. With a dark past, a shattered spirit, and a red backpack, she runs away from home and her three, ignorant older sisters. However, when she passes out and next wakes up to a pair of pretty, chocolate eyes, things change and spiral out of her control.

Somehow, she's roped into staying with her 'saviour', a boy named Ash, for the whole summer. He's arrogant, cocky, cheerful and a complete moron according to her. She's determined to keep up her icy walls, and he's determined to break them down. Old grudges arise, secrets are revealed, memories are brooded over and kitchens are destroyed (well, almost).

But at the end of the summer, can she really bring herself to leave?



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List of chapters

Ch. 0 Prolouge: Down with the rain
Ch. 1 I'm not the one named after a tree
Ch. 2 Desperate times call for desperate measures
Ch. 3 The lady dost protest too much

Comments

 
WordLover Friday, 13 July 2012
The dialogue was the star in this chapter. Great and congrats on the self-publishing. The thing is, even if you did have more chapters up, I'm not dying to continue. It's good, but the book does start off slowly. I guess my opinion doesn't matter much at this point, though.
 
WordLover Friday, 13 July 2012
Now that I've said I like the tone and voice of the main character, I will say that I like Hope and her characterization. I can't say much for Ash yet.
 
WordLover Friday, 13 July 2012
I love the tone, and strangely enough, your writing reminds me of mine a little, not so much like the work I have on here, but more recent stuff. I'm comfortable with the way your right for that reason, and it's seamless. I do think the premise is a little weird. People don't generally take someone into their house because they don't have a cell phone. They'd call out for help, and I feel like Hope should be just a tad bit more alarmed, but then again, she is probably not the normal teenager.
 
WordLover Friday, 13 July 2012
I really love the prologue. You have found something a lot of author's struggle with: a voice. I can see a fifteen year old girl speaking like this, one who is pessimistic and perhaps wise for her age. I completely agree with Shannon below. The last few sentences really made the prologue.I'll keep reading.
 
Bronze Saturday, 2 June 2012
Chapter 3, paragraph 4: you misspelled pajamas. Illiterate.
Okay, you're not quite illiterate. So sue me. I exaggerate sometimes. More like Criticize.

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