Suspicion
GenreCrime / Tragedy
Age Rating:R13
Submitted:Saturday, 27 April 2013
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Read by:370 different readers
 

A series of mysterious murders and attempted murders, all starting two years ago, in a well known family creates chaos in a small town where everyone knows everyone. There is suspect that the police are compromised. Someone among the town is the killer. Or killers. Who knows, neighbors could be part of this cult planning on killing out the Manchester family.

 

List of chapters

Ch. 0 Attempts & Murders
Ch. 0 Character List
Ch. 1 People Are Crazy
Ch. 2 I Started It
Ch. 3 Not All Of Us Are So Lucky
Ch. 4 To School
Ch. 5 Back To '42
Ch. 6 Leaving Lizzie
Ch. 7 Tough

Comments

Aurora Smith Wednesday, 15 May 2013
just finnished chapter five.
Aurora Smith Saturday, 4 May 2013
chapter three is finished
 
LittleWolf Tuesday, 30 April 2013
The way this is written is as a script. your telling a story in, what i call, in a grocery list format. you have to many "Sentences" in the actual chapter, the one where the story begins, you are trying to express what is going through the characters mind, you should try keeping it there. have them thinking this while having some actions. they are running their handds through their hair or pulling the blankets up to their chins are tighter around their frame. this isnt bad, it has great potential, i really do like the murders you have created.
 
LittleWolf Tuesday, 30 April 2013
The way this is written is as a script. your telling a story in, what i call, in a grocery list format. you have to many "Sentences" in the actual chapter, the one where the story begins, you are trying to express what is going through the characters mind, you should try keeping it there. have them thinking this while having some actions. they are running their handds through their hair or pulling the blankets up to their chins are tighter around their frame. this isnt bad, it has great potential, i really do like the murders you have created.

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