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Avi SO
Friday, 21 June 2013
The chapter in my eyes is a little too long with too much detail and small things that it gets boring in my eyes, just my two cents
Avi SO
Wednesday, 19 June 2013
I don't know if you want grammatical corrections but Lor and Loden should be capitalized and through the story there are letters mistakenly capitalized.
Avi SO
Wednesday, 19 June 2013
Just a question, what era like time is this? Is there technology like lifts and skyscrapers or is it more ancient like?
Avi SO
Wednesday, 19 June 2013
Oh, sorry, one more thing, in the middle there is a bit of dialogue which is not quotasized
Avi SO
Wednesday, 19 June 2013
Great story! A-lot of detail, just if I could just point out two things. One, the first line I think is superfluous, that can be inferred from later in the chapter, and my grandmother, who was a legal editor told me that unlike in movies, you can;t write in books "X time later", it should be a real sentence. Great job, I'll continue reading!
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