Bonds of Suffering
GenreFantasy / Young Adult
Age Rating:R13
Submitted:Thursday, 20 September 2012
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Read by:197 different readers
 

They once had lives though their few memories are filled only with images of pain and suffering. They are all too aware of the atrocities they were forced to commit in the name of the Empire but are also acutely aware that their only hope of freedom is via facing their pasts.
Total war is coming and a traitor is forced to attempt to forge a peace between warring cities before an apparently unstoppable enemy crushes them utterly.

 

List of chapters

Ch. 1 "Obey"
Ch. 2 "We have a duty"
Ch. 3 "Return to us"
Ch. 4 "Traitor"
Ch. 5 "It should have been simple"
Ch. 6 "This is the invasion"
Ch. 7 "Is it possible?"
Ch. 8 "You're actually going to fight?"
Ch. 9 "We need a plan"
Ch. 10 "You'd be very poweful"
Ch. 11 "Who were the Ancients?"
Ch. 12 "Someone has to buy you time"
Ch. 13 "Surely they know there's no hope"
Ch. 14 "Let us hope we have enough time"
Ch. 15 "We'll all die one day"
Ch. 16 "I know not what I seek"
Ch. 17 "The path to Cadosa is open"
Ch. 18 "I'm in position to strike"
Ch. 19 "You said you'd let me go"
Ch. 20 "So it's done"
Ch. 21 "The empire wanted it dragging on"
Ch. 22 "Just come back"
Ch. 23 "You've information?"
Ch. 24 "It has no name"
Ch. 25 "I'm not sure how much I trust her"
Ch. 26 "I knew you'd make it"
Ch. 27 "Any chances?"
Ch. 28 "the last fleet of the Fringe"
Ch. 29 "what's your plan?"
Ch. 30 "it was our fault"

Comments

 
M.K. Adams Thursday, 10 March 2016
Very good opening chapter, if slightly long. The layout may make it harder to read that it needs to be, but in terms of story and world building it was a very good first chapter.

PS - If you fancy reading and commenting on the first couple of chapters of my new book I would be very grateful
 
Josef Tuesday, 23 October 2012
Plenty of potential here. I read the fisrt draft and already this is showing more polish. Certainly shaping into a good book (possible series?).
The style of writing isn't too heavy on description, allowing the reader to fill in the blanks. In my mind, this helps keep things moving, especially considering the story involves multiple plots.
I'm enjoying it and looking forward to future updates which will hopefully plug a few holes in the original.
Thumbs up!
 
Bob Craton Thursday, 20 September 2012
An interesting premise with an entertaining action-packed beginning. Perhaps some phrases could be polished here and there but overall this is good stuff.

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