In the Beginning
GenreMystery / Sci-Fi
Age Rating:G
Submitted:Thursday, 21 June 2012
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(78 ratings)
Read by:930 different readers
 

"Greg, this is not about God. This is science."
"Justin, everything is about God," Greg spoke sternly, raising an eyebrow.
"Not this," I replied.

For years man has been unable to determine how the pyramids were built. Many have speculated that they, as well as other mysteries of history, were built with the help of an advanced technology that was other worldly.

In 1997, Justin Dickerson is unhappy about her life in general and has decided to run away from her problems. But before she can go, she is asked to take a trip to Jerusalem for the Fiftieth Anniversary of the finding of the Dead Sea Scrolls. There she finds that in 1949 Jerusalem an attempt to hide the history of man had been made. But this secret can't stay hidden because Justin soon discovers that in the caves at Qumran a secret has been hidden for over two thousand years in ancient manuscripts. After deciphering them she learns that Man didn't originate on Earth and all the stories about aliens visiting and building the pyramids, stonehenge, and the stone figures at Easter Island just may be true. But more shocking, she learns just who the aliens really are.

Through it all, Justin wants to count on her faith to answer all life's questions, but this mystery has nothing to do with God, but everything to do with Man's intellegence and arrogance.

Follow Justin as she unlocks the secrets of the manuscripts and discovers the answers to some of history's true life mysteries.

Only half of the book is presented here. Hopefully, it will be published soon and can read the entire book and then be sure to look forward to the second in this series.

 

List of chapters

Ch. 0 Prologue
Ch. 1 Chapter One
Ch. 2 Chapter Two
Ch. 3 Chapter Three
Ch. 4 Chapter Four
Ch. 5 Chapter Five
Ch. 6 Chapter Six
Ch. 7 Chapter Seven
Ch. 8 Chapter Eight
Ch. 9 Chapter Nine
Ch. 10 Chapter Ten
Ch. 11 Chapter Eleven
Ch. 12 Chapter Twelve
Ch. 13 Chapter Thirteen
Ch. 14 Chapter Fourteen
Ch. 15 Chapter Twenty-Seven

Comments

 
aechon Friday, 13 March 2015
Well paced writing.I am enjoying it very much; your style leads the reader to continue successfully. Well done. If you get a chance have a glance at Sonny's Bar, for a change of pace. It seems you are having fun which is great !.
 
dimples83 Monday, 10 September 2012
Great i like it. i hope you continue with this
 
akbcello Sunday, 19 August 2012
I am enjoying this so far- you have created a good stage for the rest of your novel. An element I thought achieved a good element of mystery was how you hinted at the calamity through the beginning of the chapter, but still explained the big issue within the same chapter. Many writers tend to whack around the bush by not addressing anything until a few chapters into the novel.
One rule of thumb that someone suggested in my own writing was to watch the beginning of sentences. No two sentences in the same paragraph should start with the same word; likewise, no two paragraphs should begin with the same word. Of course, in many cases, this cannot be helped, but I think it would be a good idea if you looked at this chapter keeping that in mind. The fourth paragraph, for instance, loses a little of the attention that it deserves because almost all the sentences begin with "his." If you were to use differing sentence structures (for example, that one sentence that starts with "Unaware" in the paragraph in question), then the piece could be more fascinating to the reader.
I do have to agree with Andre Jones when I say I like to read a book and get a picture in my head. Since there is more action than description happening in this part of the story, it is difficult for me to truly take in the scene. There are a few magical moments when you describe the rain storming outside, or the flustered characters, but I think that the chapter would be better if you added a touch more description.
Finally, in the second to last paragraph, last sentence, there would be a greater effect if you split the sentence into two. Short, two word sentences are simple, but can create a dramatic air. Therefore, I suggest this; "He looked down at the floor, and did something he rarely did. He lied." You can even use a semicolon to split the clauses, but I think that a comma just doesn't cut it.
Thank you for sharing this! I am very fascinated with your ideas, and this is truly a solid step towards something great. I will keep reading! :)
 
Rosie K Thursday, 16 August 2012
WOW!
From what I've read, the story is amazing. The plot is well thought through and interesting.
I don't usually read sci-fi but look at me now!
I'll be reading the whole thing as soon as I can.
Love it.

I found some errors in the book but I won't state them because Lily M has stated them out perfectly.
I found similar errors in the chapters she hasn't reviewed!

But all in all, a great read!
 
abloobudoo009 Wednesday, 15 August 2012
I should've read this earlier.

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