Outlawed
GenreFantasy / Fiction
Age Rating:R13
Submitted:Saturday, 5 November 2011
Star rating:
 
(2 ratings)
Read by:221 different readers
 

Bethany is the new girl...once again. Only this time she's moved to a place she hates, with a school bigger than she can grasp, and a name change to go right along with it. She knows her ability is to blame, or curse, better yet. The second a person finds out about it, her parents whisk her away without a chance to look back.

She's sick of it, so sick she gives herself no other choice but to become invisible. But even that seems hard once a few students suddenly take an interest to her, and she soon learns she isn't the only one with this "curse." Once she discovers there's a whole group of people just like her, she's joined into The House, a place in which the gifted kids go for shelter in the area. Itís there that she can finally be herself, blend in without even trying. She's never felt so normal...

Then she discovers a secret group within the House, one that uses their gifts for illegal things. Though she knows her values say otherwise, itís the promise of money that lures her in. Maybe now her parents won't stress over their increasing debt, and maybe she'll be able to buy herself another car. Or maybe, just maybe, it will make things more worse than she could have ever imagined.

 

List of chapters

Ch. 1 o n e
Ch. 2 t w o
Ch. 3 t h r e e
Ch. 4 f o u r

Comments

 
Bronze Friday, 30 October 2015
This is beautifully crafted. The intrigue was layered perfectly with everyday life, and you portrayed the feeling of going to a new school really well; better than some published authors I've read. Smashing job; I love this so far.
Only one tip I've got; keep the swear words to a minimum as much as possible. They can really turn some readers off, even if your book itself is excellent.
Keep writing!
 
BriCo Monday, 5 December 2011
I love this story. I can't wait for you to write more. I want to know what Connor and that guy he was talking to want with her. Also who is this Luke kid and whats his deal? Or is Luke and Connor one and the same. So keep it up you have me hooked.
 
BriCo Thursday, 17 November 2011
I ment my books not my boons sorry.
 
BriCo Thursday, 17 November 2011
I realy like this cant wait for.more. Your story telling and attention to details are very good. You had me wondering from the begining what was going on with her. I will be reading the rest when you post it you should check out my boons when you have the time. Shadow world and Pandora's Order

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