reality nightmare ( chapter 1 and 2 in middle of a MONSTER editing job!!!!)
GenreThriller / Suspense
Age Rating:R13
Submitted:Sunday, 19 April 2009
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(23 ratings)
Read by:551 different readers
 

samantha starts getting death threats in her locker. She starts seeing things and her new boyfriend Kyle says he knows what’s going on and that he can help her. Samantha puts all her trust in Kyle in until it’s too late. He’s on “the evils” side. Who’s going to help her now?

 

List of chapters

Ch. 0 Authors note
Ch. 0 when...
Ch. 1 Kyle Themastit
Ch. 2 first kiss to warn others. Back off
Ch. 3 ditching school
Ch. 4 you have a boyfriend?
Ch. 5 death threats
Ch. 6 opening death
Ch. 7 he knows
Ch. 8 waiting for kyle
Ch. 9 escaping
Ch. 10 who am i?
Ch. 11 wonder
Ch. 12 overhearing him
Ch. 13 truth or dare?
Ch. 14 you know?

Comments

 
E.M. Wheeler Wednesday, 1 December 2010
This is a good book although there are spelling errors. I do agree with other comments keep already fictional characters out that way its an original. Like replace snow white with another female you created yourself. She can be like snow white but still your own. Also slow it down a bit. I"m really sorry if I'm being rude =(. I'm only trying to help. If you fix little things like that this will be a totally awesome book. One that I'd buy if it got published.
 
Danielle Evans Monday, 26 July 2010
This is very good so far, despite the spelling errors. Please write another chapter soon.
 
A.E. Eidem Thursday, 8 April 2010
Um hello This is my ols account
I know this story is not very good, but if you want you can come check out stuff on my new account. (MY email got messed up thats why i got a new account)
Taylor van de Locht Wednesday, 17 March 2010
Just thought I would mention, publishers love brevity, your prose is the opposite, one could say: "You write (talk) too much."
Stop writing in short sentences, it nerves, no end.
Taylor van de Locht Wednesday, 17 March 2010
Your prose is overtly purple, try cutting back on description, show,don't tell.

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