The Spell-less One (working title)
GenreFantasy / Adventure
Age Rating:R15
Submitted:Monday, 11 October 2010
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When the irrimiir left their continental home of Irridor and met the ruling vuniir, the Sigil Wars began over common land disputes. The Wars lasted for five centuries and thousands died on both sides but, in the end, the Irrimiir were victorious.

But a time is coming when the Vuniir will return and a new war will be waged. Not for land but for the very survival of the Irrimiir people.

I will be posting just enough chapters to introduce most of the main characters, which should amount to about the first three chapters, and then maybe two of the middle chapters.

 

List of chapters

Ch. 1 In the Twilight Vale
Ch. 1 In the Twilight Vale pt 2
Ch. 2 In the Twilight Vale pt 3 (real end of Ch. 1)
Ch. 3 Into A King's Crypt pt. 1
Ch. 4 Into A King's Crypt part 2
Ch. 5 Into A King's Crypt part 3
Ch. 6 Into A King's Crypt pt 4 [real end of chap 2; get comfy because it's kinda long]

Comments

Brenaq Friday, 12 November 2010
i'll split this up tomorrow.
Brenaq Friday, 12 November 2010
i'll split this up tomorrow.
 
Elijah Willis Sunday, 17 October 2010
woah! This chapters is longer than mine(and mine are long, trust me. I've got thirty pages in one of mine(unless that one is that one I chopped)). If this is only the first part of ch1, I really suggest you break this up somehow(unless your intent is for something like lord of the rings)

I'm going to give you another comment after I finish reading what you have. But I also have to say, you really have to pick a photo so people can get somewhat of an idea of what they're going to be reading. Most people don't go through reading descriptions. People need visuals. Especially in the fantasy section because there's a whole bunch of vampire galore in there! You can always pick something from google images and post it.
 
JulieAlexandra Thursday, 14 October 2010
This IS good.
I agree with China Roses, though.
And, maybe, see if you can make this into two chapters. It's kind of overwhelming, but totally worth it.
You've got something pretty good on your hands, here!
 
China Roses Wednesday, 13 October 2010
This is good. Just watch the comma usage. There is a minor error. A little more white space between the paragraphs would be appreciated.

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