Soldiers of the Damned
GenreWar / Romance
Age Rating:R13
Submitted:Saturday, 26 June 2010
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(7 ratings)
Read by:542 different readers
 

In the year 2245 the US is at war with China, and we have the upper hand! The Super Soldier Program (SSP) has developed a drug known simply as "Red", a very powerful substance which will completely enhance the users body. Welcome to the world of Randy Miller, one of New York City's Super Soldiers. Randy may not know it yet, but he's about to get the love of his life, and meet a few interesting people along the way... all while fighting for his life. (Note: Later Chapters may involve some very graphic scenes.)

Special thank to Hunter Brianna Garcia, for being such a loving and supporting part in my life. I love you Hunter, always and forever. <3

 

List of chapters

Ch. 1 Begining
Ch. 2 News
Ch. 3 Bar fight
Ch. 4 The meeting
Ch. 5 First day out
Ch. 6 Date
Ch. 7 Black blood for a black heart
Ch. 8 Mike
Ch. 9 Blood Club
Ch. 10 Dead on the dance floor
Ch. 11 Overkill
Ch. 12 Cain Mini-Chapter
Ch. 13 Randy vs Drake
Ch. 14 Little help from my "Friend"

Comments

 
Jezilena Anne Treloar Monday, 20 February 2012
Hi Kirby!
 
SuperMousey Monday, 8 August 2011
This is really great! I enjoyed the dialogue, characters, it was well-written! I think it gets info-dumpy a lot when you introduce new topics, things or people. You should watch out fot that.

Apart from that, great! :)
Garrett R. Kirby Thursday, 26 August 2010
Just thought I would clear this up real fast. I know a lot of the bad things are in Chapter one, and I have realized is it not the best, heck, it's the worst chapter in the book so far, which is why I am re-writing it before I go into publishing. Also, three more Chapters and the book is done on here. I won't be posting the entire thing. I hope you all purchase a copy when I do get it published! Thank you all for your support, and check back for three new chapters within the next day or two.
coritherien Wednesday, 18 August 2010
I really like your story!
I only have two criticisms: I agree with E. C. Schroeder, it sounds a little informal to be introducing a high-tech military program, you know?
Second: I would try to be a little more subtle about the way you introduce things, if that makes any sense. When you introduce a new topic, for instance, don't explain every aspect of it right away but instead, leave the reader wondering a little as to how everything works. Explain it later on in the story when you put the topic to use. Just a suggestion! Your story really is very good, I'll be sure to keep reading :D.

I would really appreciate if you took a look at my story! It's a wartime narrative too, but it's not futuristic :p.
 
E. C. Schroeder Saturday, 14 August 2010
I like the beginning; you're a talented writer. One thing that bothered me though: I think Miller's voice in the start of Chapter One sounds a little too casual. He sounds like he's talking to a close buddy and not narrating his story. And you don't necessarily have to introduce the other members of the squad before the story gets rolling; as they slowly take shape in the opening scene they can be introduced. Other than that, great job!

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