Immortals Saga #1: Immortal (Copyright 2008)
GenreFiction / Romance
Age Rating:R15
Submitted:Tuesday, 13 January 2009
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(33 ratings)
Read by:703 different readers
 

I needed to feel his flesh give way to those weapons. I had to taste his blood as it trickled down my throat. God help me, I tried to fight, but I wanted to devour my lover more than I wanted him safe.

I crawled away, hoping that the moist air would quench that hypnotic smell and I would be able to stop this before it turned deadly. The darkness had suddenly become anything but safe, and with the fear forcing me to fight to survive, I knew the bloodthirsty beast in me would soon take over. I didnít want him to see me like this. How could he possibly accept me when I couldnít accept myself? How could he love such evil? He began to crawl towards me. I hid again. He persisted. I could no longer control it. The thirst took over.

 

List of chapters

Ch. 0 Prologue (Edited 10-20-10)
Ch. 1 Threat (Edited 10-20-10)

Comments

Ravyn Underhill Tuesday, 16 August 2011
You have an AMAZING writing style. The descriptions are so vivid and make the chapter come to life. I could see that this is one vampire story that I would entirely enjoy.
 
meredith Saturday, 14 August 2010
This is an awsome piece of work. You draw the reader in from the first paragraph. The dialougue flows very well and your description is at times, quite beautiful. Look forward to reading more.

Would you mind taking a look at my book Angel Eyes? Any feedback would be appriciated
Thanks M.
 
Jacqueline Tuesday, 20 July 2010
Your writing is superb. I love it! Will you read mine? (The Dark Side of the Moon)
 
Lolita1149 Thursday, 13 May 2010
My heart skipped a beat. Loved it!
 
Geoff Dean Wednesday, 18 November 2009
I like what you have done with the book. The line about licking the remnants of her life from his lips is chilling in its clinicalness. I also like the way things are never spelled out clearly but the reader is drawn in and forced to make his or her own conclusions. Well done!

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